An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet. Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The international development organization's solution to vitamin A deficiency prevalent in the people of Tagus is commendable. Nevertheless, the government of Tagus must try to pose itself several questions before deciding to tout for the newly engineered breed of millet.
Firstly, why did the international organization choose millet, out of all grains, to infuse with vitamin A? It could very well be the case that there are other viable alternatives to millet or even other grains that are naturally rich sources of vitamin A. An investigation, probing into the nature of millet and the reason behind it being the grain of choice for the organization, must be conducted to gain insight. It is mentioned in the recommendation that the costs of cultivating the newly engineered grain will be subsidized. If the government of Tagus has to bear the expenses due to subsidies, it would help to first establish that there is an absolute benefit from investing in the new breed of millet and that no other solutions exist.
The recommendation presumes that vitamin A deficiency arises only due to the lack of consumption of foods rich in vitamin A. However, there could be a myriad of other reasons affecting the population of Tagus. One possibility is that the people of Tagus may be suffering from the effects of a disease that causes reduced absorption of vitamins in the body. It would be wise for the government to conduct medical examinations for its people, free of cost, to ensure that increasing the supply of vitamin A will certainly help them.
The prompt posits that finances are the only factor that drives farmers to cultivate a crop. In most countries, agriculture is a backbone of the economy and has deep rooted origins, intertwined with the traditions of the nation. It may be the case that farmers are unwilling to cultivate this newly engineered crop simply because of its seemingly contrived nature. Farmers may see it as a threat to their traditions, in which case, effective advertising by the government would be needed to assimilate the new crop.
Yet another presumption in the recommendation is that the people of Tagus will readily adopt the new millet, as it is their staple food. This discounts the possibility that infusing vitamin A, or augmenting its existing quantity in the grain will not affect its appearance, odor or taste. Images of staple foods are often ingrained in a nations' population and adopting a new grain different in either of the aspects mentioned above could prove to be challenging, as it would invoke a sense of foreign establishments penetrating their culture, even if it is for their ultimate welfare.
Bringing about a change in the staple food of a country is a colossal challenge. The government of Tagus must address all of the questions mentioned above before deciding to advance this Herculean task.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 476 350
No. of Characters: 2341 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.671 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.918 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.928 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.754 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.471 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.611 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.056 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 17, column 338, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...f staple foods are often ingrained in a nations population and adopting a new grain dif...
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Line 21, column 119, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...e. The government of Tagus must address all of the questions mentioned above before decidi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, well, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2407.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 476.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05672268908 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9820827321 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474789915966 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2647544033 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.35 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.15 5.70786347227 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377724799143 0.218282227539 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106955565056 0.0743258471296 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563301076687 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183803207285 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0865983910378 0.0628817314937 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 98.500998004 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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