An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
In the given passage, it discusses about bringing a new breed of millet which is high in vitamin A in response to vitamin A deficiency among people in Tagus. It says that there seed costs more and also farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of crops.
Indeed this is a good solution taken by the government of Tagus but the government is only looking into one option. They are not considering other possibilities or solutions through which they could handle this problem.
The government is only focusing on promoting the new type of millet. It says that millet is already a staple food in Tagus and thus people will readily accept the new variety. It is just an assumption. It can also happen in the other way such that as it is a new variety there is a possibility for the people disliking the millet due some factors such as its taste, price and so on. So it is not a sure thing that the people of Tagus will accept this new variety.
Also it is told that the seeds of the new type of millet costs more. Thus it is sure that the selling price of millet will be high. This can make people lose interest in purchasing this new variety. Thus all possibilities should be take into consideration while opting for a method to implement in a country. Other options such as medicines for the lack of vitamin A and many more can also be considered as a solution.
Other methods should be found out to solve the problem of vitamin A deficiency instead of sticking onto a single method. All possibilities should be take into consideration so that even if it fails there is another option to solve the issue.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 297 350
No. of Characters: 1301 1500
No. of Different Words: 139 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.151 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.38 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.48 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 80 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 54 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 29 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.562 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.176 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.342 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.579 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
...for farming the new variety of crops. Indeed this is a good solution taken by the go...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 203, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... new variety. It is just an assumption. It can also happen in the other way such t...
^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...agus will accept this new variety. Also it is told that the seeds of the new ty...
^^^^
Line 11, column 70, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...s of the new type of millet costs more. Thus it is sure that the selling price of mi...
^^^^
Line 11, column 200, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...nterest in purchasing this new variety. Thus all possibilities should be take into c...
^^^^
Line 11, column 233, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'taken'?
Suggestion: taken
...riety. Thus all possibilities should be take into consideration while opting for a m...
^^^^
Line 15, column 150, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'taken'?
Suggestion: taken
...gle method. All possibilities should be take into consideration so that even if it f...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, thus, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1340.0 2260.96107784 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 297.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51178451178 5.12650576532 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53010084521 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.464646464646 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 705.55239521 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.825602507 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.75 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5625 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8125 5.70786347227 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.456266161046 0.218282227539 209% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153509480388 0.0743258471296 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106727590508 0.0701772020484 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253170467344 0.128457276422 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.173090611972 0.0628817314937 275% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 14.3799401198 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.3550499002 145% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.197005988 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 12.5979740519 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 98.500998004 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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