An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The author conclude that people of Tagus can get rid of the deficiency of vitamin A by using breed of millet. The line of reasoning is producing millet in large volume to cure people who need vitamin A. Moreover, author state that providing subsidies can encourage farmers to produce more millet in order to meet the demand. Author also suggest that government of Tagus should take all the necessary steps to ensure people have sufficient vitamin A. The assumption is not convincing for various reasons.
Firstly, the author state that new breed of millet seeds cost more and farmers will be given more subsidies to grow millet. However, author does not provide evidences or insights generated out of the data/survey/research. It is possible that due to high cost of the new seed of millet people will avoid using it as it is not pocket friendly. Also, the economic condition of Tagus is not mentioned which stated that an average citizen can buy the new expensive breed of millet. Hence, the author assumption is not convincing.
Secondly, author state that people of Tagus regularly use millet in their food. The support assumption is unwarranted. It is equally reasonable to say that new breed of millet would not be as popular as the other breed in terms of price or taste. It might not be suitable for the poor population of Tagus suffering for vitamin A deficiency.The common breed of the millet can be abundant due to low production cost along with being good in taste. Thus, it is presumptuous to conclude the author's assumption as this need to be supported by strong evidences.
Finally, even if the assumption is true. Author ignores to highlight the steps government of Tagus should take to eradicate the deficiency of vitamin A. Author should provide evidences like awareness campaign, providing cheap medicine etc. to showcase the sincerity.
In conclusion, we can say that the assumption stated need to be supports with concrete evidences. Just by stating that increase in production of millet will cure the problem of deficiency of vitamin A in the people of the Tagus. Moreover, author does not state the measures Tagus government should take to obliterate the deficiency of vitamin A. After providing solid proofs this assumption can be more than an emotional appeal.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1867 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.837 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.562 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.358 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.376 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.557 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'concludes'.
Suggestion: concludes
The author conclude that people of Tagus can get rid of the...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 341, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...agus suffering for vitamin A deficiency.The common breed of the millet can be abund...
^^^
Line 9, column 488, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...hus, it is presumptuous to conclude the authors assumption as this need to be supported...
^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 74, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'steps'' or 'step's'?
Suggestion: steps'; step's
...s true. Author ignores to highlight the steps government of Tagus should take to erad...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 383.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0182767624 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78294199327 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.436031331593 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 604.8 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.300473574 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5652173913 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.652173913 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4347826087 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380005429398 0.218282227539 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113172517999 0.0743258471296 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101114823694 0.0701772020484 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229625141989 0.128457276422 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0942563844812 0.0628817314937 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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