An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
In these memo, the author recommends that the government of Tagus should do everything so that they promote new type of miller as it is a stable food in most of the home of Tagus area. To bolster the recommendation, the author cites the following facts: (1) a new of millet is high in Vitamin A as prescribe by an international development organization (2) farmers of Tagus should be facilitated to buy new millet as it costs high for farming (3) new millet will be easily adopted by the people as it is stable food in Tagus. Close scrutiny of each of the facts however reveals that none of them lend credible evidence to support the recommendation.
First, the argument readily assumes that the new breed of millet is high in vitamin A. If this is the case, then why definite information regarding such new breed is not exposed to common people till date. Similarly, different information on its quality and general inspection about it on the breeding farms is not also done. Moreover, different statistical reports on its effectiveness is not proven well. Therefore, the arguments fails to mention the appropriate nature and quality of such breed and its effectiveness to the common people.
Secondly, the argument readily assumes that millet is the stable food in Tagus. Thus, this definitely deviate the information regarding the preferences of people on other food items. Similarly, it is not true that all of the people of Tagus are quite fond of eating food varieties of Millet. Thus, there may be other members of the community who may also preferred other types of food items. Hence, the argument remains fully doubtful and inconclusive and may not be viable to support the recommendation.
Finally, the argument fails to mention one of the key factors on the basis of which it could have been evaluated, the author urge Tagus government to provide subsidies to buy new breed of millet as it cost high. However, the author doesn't provide the information about such farmers who prefer to cultivate other varieties of cash crops rather than millet. Similarly. different statistical reports about such farmers who prefer to cultivate new breed of millet is not provide. So, this sort of activities definitely harsh the national economy as government will invest quite irregularly on such farmers. Therefore, the argument remains unsubstantiated and become open to debate.
To sum up, the argument relies on dubious assumption that renders unconvincing as it stands. To bolster the mention recommendation, the author must provide clear evidence; perhaps by a local study or survey; appropriate reports on the effectiveness of such breed should be taken, fixed number of farmers who prefers new breed of millet should be taken out so that nation economy will be sustained and several studies about the preferences of other food varieties should be taken out to examine the real preferences of people regarding different food varieties. To assure the recommendation, I would need to know why effective study on general level is not done till date and why different pocket zone of agriculture is not declared so as to enhance the national economy and living standards of farmers.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 530 350
No. of Characters: 2598 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.798 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.902 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.812 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 190 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 139 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.675 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.95 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.548 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 4, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this memo' or 'these memos'?
Suggestion: this memo; these memos
In these memo, the author recommends that the governm...
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Line 1, column 521, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'scrutiny'.
Suggestion: Scrutiny
...e people as it is stable food in Tagus. Close scrutiny of each of the facts however reveals th...
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Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly, different information on its quality and general inspection about it on the b...
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Line 5, column 215, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...d items. Similarly, it is not true that all of the people of Tagus are quite fond of eatin...
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Line 7, column 233, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...et as it cost high. However, the author doesnt provide the information about such farm...
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Line 7, column 357, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...eties of cash crops rather than millet. Similarly. different statistical reports about su...
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Line 7, column 368, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Different
...sh crops rather than millet. Similarly. different statistical reports about such farmers ...
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Line 7, column 468, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'provided'.
Suggestion: provided
...to cultivate new breed of millet is not provide. So, this sort of activities definitely...
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Line 9, column 562, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ple regarding different food varieties. To assure the recommendation, I would need...
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Line 9, column 733, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ket zone of agriculture is not declared so as to enhance the national economy and living...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, as to, sort of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 55.5748502994 144% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2655.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 529.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01890359168 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88139604586 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431001890359 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 849.6 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 93.6272098365 57.8364921388 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.428571429 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1904761905 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38095238095 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322692807199 0.218282227539 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0949215635985 0.0743258471296 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111561345567 0.0701772020484 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191603014282 0.128457276422 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0917936302396 0.0628817314937 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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