"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the num

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"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."

A letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner predict that business in central plaza will return to its previously high levels if skateboarding is prohibited. However, a letter fails to answer many questions which is necessary to conclude whether skateboarding will be prohibited or not.

A latter argues that because of popularity of skateboarding has increased in last two years, number of shoppers decreases. But if people more come to Central plaza then there may have chance that they at least visit shops in plaza. Because of popularity of skateboarding increased, that doesn’t means that skateboarding is the only reason for decrease customers. And number has decreased over the last two years. So, there must be other problems also for reduced customers. There are high possibilities that due to skateboarding in Central plaza, people know about other shops in plaza and they didn't like to buy anything. So, Author fails to answer details about other problems which reduced customers of shops.

Many shop owners believe that number of decreases in their business due to skateboarding. If they think skateboarding is popular among people then they should start coaching of skateboarding instead of prohibit it. Prohibit something which is popular among society may not increase their business. Starting coaching classes will make more profit from skateboarding also more people will visit their shops. If they prohibit skateboarding then people will find another place for skateboarding. And there is no other information about places where children can skateboard so it will increase their business. And there are no accurate details about how their business increases if they prohibit skateboarding.

There is dramatic increase in vandalism and litter throughout plaza. It is possible that due to increase in litter and vandalism people prefer not to visit Central plaza. If place is not decent and clean then people may not prefer to go such places. Instead of recommending prohibition on skateboarding in Central plaza, Owner of shops should find out main reason about people not visiting their shops. They should ask people to review about plaza and take advice from them. Author should answer about reasons of peoples not to visit central plaza.

In conclusion, there are some questions that author fails to answer. There more reasons of decreasing number of shoppers. If they think that skateboarding is the main reason then instead of prohibits skateboarding, they should take advantage of skateboarding to increase the visitors in Central plaza.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
A letter to the editor from a Central Pl...
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Line 3, column 602, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...now about other shops in plaza and they didnt like to buy anything. So, Author fails ...
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Line 5, column 92, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...in their business due to skateboarding. If they think skateboarding is popular amo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, then, at least, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2187.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 408.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36029411765 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85975430496 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.414215686275 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.0 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9318422074 57.8364921388 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.48 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.32 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.48 5.70786347227 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352262986453 0.218282227539 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118519152847 0.0743258471296 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0903497274725 0.0701772020484 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217000589008 0.128457276422 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476488180537 0.0628817314937 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.51 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 410 350
No. of Characters: 2125 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.5 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.183 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.788 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.521 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.56 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.514 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.093 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5