Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previous high levels."
The argument states that, the increased skateboarding is the reason for decreased number of shoppers in Central plaza. This conclusion made by the author is not convincing and do not provide proper evidences on the basis of which this argument could be evaluated. The statements seems to be vague and made on lot of assumptions. Furthermore, the author need to consider various other important factors before concluding that decreasing the number of skateboard users would increase the business in Central Plaza.
Firstly, this pattern of reduction in business is found only during past 2 years and not before. The author has to conduct a detailed survey on all the changes happened in Plaza during these 2 years. There might be several other key factors such as, the people around plaza are not that financially strong to run stores in Plaza and in addition to that, there might be possibilities of having low business due to increase in the cost of the items sold in Plaza. Author has to consider the improvements or changes in the area of Central Plaza and find out the scale of population. Without all these evidences, it is unrealistic to come up with any solution.
Secondly, the author believes that this has also caused increase in the amount of litter and vandalism around Plaza. One can argue that this statement is vague and has no legs to stand. Increase in robbery or destruction may have caused due to other reasons such as lack of police stations in this area.The author fails to support his statement as how this is correlated to increased skateboard users. One cannot assume that people who are involved in skateboarding are responsible for these activities which are against the low. Author has to provide some proper evidences to support his statement.
Finally, to summarize, I would say that without the proper evidences one should not conclude to prohibit skateboarding. There might be many other advantages of skateboarding because it reduces the use of automobiles in the city and hence prevents Environmental pollution and global worming. In-order to prove his point, author has to consider all the factors mentioned above and make a research on the various other causes than simply making a false assumption.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK. Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previous high levels.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 373 350
No. of Characters: 1832 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.395 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.912 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.698 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.941 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.194 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.412 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.516 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.051 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 280, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'seem'.
Suggestion: seem
...ment could be evaluated. The statements seems to be vague and made on lot of assumpti...
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Line 8, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Plaza. One can argue that this statement is vague and has no legs to stand. Incre...
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Line 8, column 305, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...as lack of police stations in this area.The author fails to support his statement a...
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Line 11, column 201, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...skateboarding because it reduces the use of automobiles in the city and hence pre...
^^
Line 11, column 386, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...ll the factors mentioned above and make a research on the various other causes than simply...
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Line 11, column 464, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... than simply making a false assumption.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, may, second, secondly, so, as to, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 372.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05376344086 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76984530448 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505376344086 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1159207589 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.588235294 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8823529412 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211033338135 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687611966022 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940417682167 0.0701772020484 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12780181241 0.128457276422 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0931056091173 0.0628817314937 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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