"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have just canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level."
This argument claims that we should restore the time devoted to whether and local news to its formal level because there is a decrease in number of viewers and also loss in advertising revenue. Stated in this way argument fails to mention several key factors on the bases of which it could be evaluated. The conclusion relies on some evidences which are not very convincing. Therefore, the argument is very weak, unconvincing and has several flaws.
Firstly, argument conveys that over the past year there are lot of complaints from viewers regarding the coverage of weather and local news. One can strongly argue that this statement is vague as it doesn't mention what was the exact complaint from viewers. The customers may also have complained about improvising the content shown in the national news and which cannot be given as a support to increase in coverage for weather and local news. Even though they might have stressed upon improvising the timings for broadcasting weather and local reports, It can be possible that we can satisfy their requirements by broadcasting it during different timings. Hence, This statement is a scratch and not sustainable any way. There are numerous different possibilities and solutions to the issue. For example, weather and local news can be exposed during other peak times. This would satisfy the customers and as well as there is no need to alter the timings of national news.
Secondly, the argument states that due to the altered timings, local businesses that used to advertise during the news have canceled their advertising contracts. This statement could have been much more clearer if it explicitly explained what was the reason behind taking back the contracts. One cannot deny that these advertising companies might have got a better deal with other channel and hence they would have canceled the contact. It could be argued that after the change in timings of the national news and weather reports the channel has reduced the gap provided for advertisements and as a result, they might have taken back the contract. Therefore, the argument is not acceptable and do not have proper evidence to support their statement.
Moreover, to prevent the advertising revenue they can approach to new dealers and try improvising their revenues. To attract more viewers they can improve the content of the news broadcast. Which will surely attract attenders no matter what time the news is shown. In addition, they can try adjusting the timings for weather with other shows and get some feedback from the viewers. And also they can analyse the pattern of people watching news and figure out the time during which most of the people prefer watching news and display it during those hours. This can attract more spectators.
In summary, to wind up, the argument is flawed and unconvincing. It could considerably strengthened if the author mentioned all the relevant facts rather than just displaying the solution without proper evidence.It is necessary to have full background knowledge of the issue and contributing factors of the issue.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not exactly. Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 508 350
No. of Characters: 2529 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.748 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.978 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.557 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 180 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 147 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.32 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.12 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.68 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.287 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.493 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s to its formal level because there is a decrease in number of viewers and also l...
^^
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...venue. Stated in this way argument fails to mention several key factors on the ba...
^^^
Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...rgue that this statement is vague as it doesnt mention what was the exact complaint fr...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 732, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'numerous'.
Suggestion: numerous
... and not sustainable any way. There are numerous different possibilities and solutions to the issu...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 199, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'clearer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: clearer
...ts. This statement could have been much more clearer if it explicitly explained what was the...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 12, column 191, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rove the content of the news broadcast. Which will surely attract attenders no matter...
^^^^^
Line 12, column 236, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... will surely attract attenders no matter what time the news is shown. In addition...
^^^
Line 16, column 88, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'strengthen'
Suggestion: strengthen
...and unconvincing. It could considerably strengthened if the author mentioned all the relevan...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 16, column 213, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...ng the solution without proper evidence.It is necessary to have full background kn...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in summary, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 11.1786427146 197% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2605.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 506.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14822134387 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63151847204 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470355731225 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 783.0 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.2 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.24 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274615464654 0.218282227539 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805583449558 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793183424878 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124443743126 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110693107378 0.0628817314937 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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