Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels
In this text, the author argues that the business of Central Plaza has decreased because of the increasing popularity of skateboarding in the area. This argument rests on several unsubstantiated assumptions, which I discuss below.
The argument mentions that there has been a dramatic increase of litter and vandalism which might turn away potential shoppers. The author believes that the increased littering and vandalism stems from the increased popularity of skateboarding. However, there is no evidence to connect the two. It would be prudent to have street cameras that can record the miscreants who are performing such activities so that it can be determined if the skateboarders are responsible or not.
The author argues that the dramatic increase in skateboarding over the past two years has resulted in steady decreases in the number of shoppers in Central Plaza. There is no evidence whatsoever that ties these two effects together. It is possible that the economy was going downhill from the past couple of years which resulted in people spending less and saving more. Studies and reports on the economic condition of the area as well as how it affected the daily lives of the residents would be a good measure to deduce whether economic factors are responsible for the reduced business at Central Plaza.
Say we do consider that the economic condition was the same over the past couple of years and that it should have had no effect on the shopping habits of the residents - it is quite possible that newer shopping centers opened up that catered to the needs of the residents better. The newer centers might have newer stock of goods, better places to eat, better ambience and in general, a more positive experience to offer to the shoppers. Evidence of such competing shopping centers that opened up would help shed light on whether this was the cause of reduced business at Central Plaza.
I would like to conclude by saying that there is a plethora of reasons that could be responsible for reduced business at Central Plaza. It would unwise to not seek concrete evidence for possible explanations and pin it, without reason, on the skateboarders.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 360 350
No. of Characters: 1775 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.356 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.931 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.692 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.814 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.267 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.58 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, well, in general, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 360.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06388888889 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73476655965 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486111111111 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9760183469 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.533333333 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254556690229 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921675150588 0.0743258471296 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116662420031 0.0701772020484 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14540068863 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0773539032801 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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