"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
While the business of the shops in central plaza may have decreased over the past two years, the author’s argument is rife with holes and a good deal of unanswered questions and doesn’t make a cogent case for prohibition of skateboarding throughout the central plaza.
Are the acts of littering and vandalism only performed by skateboarders in the plaza? The author makes no clear connection between the two, maybe the littering of trash was a long going problem even before skateboarding became popular. Another similar question is to ask about the attitude of other customers towards skateboarders, do they abhor or are they indifferent to them.
Do people who skateboard not shop at the plaza? is another question based on the author’s assumption of them not contributing to the commerce of the plaza, maybe they come to buy commodities or products, which would imply that they are customers to the shops at the plaza commuting using a skateboard for commuting. Some shopkeepers who sell products which are not targeted towards the group of people who skateboard or shopkeepers my have some personal bias against skateboarding leading them to form such opinions, the author has not shared even ballpark figures which may help estimate if the opinion against skateboarding from a sizeable number of shopkeepers or a handful.
Over the years as cities and localities grow, more shops, marketplaces, plazas may open, which points to the very important question of whether over the two years competition has increased and is now sharing the consumer base with the plaza. The competitors may have offered better prices, better variety, and newly developed plaza and hence attracted more customers. Factors like these directly affect the business of central plaza shops.
It is in everyone’s best interest for the businesses of shop owners to grow, it will boost the economy and add value to the surrounding area, but the author’s argument doesn't support the restoration of business to higher levels by prohibiting skateboarding. Skateboarders may have caused issues such as occupying public spaces for their activities and endangering accidents with other individuals especially small children and old people, for these concerns a ban might be placed on skateboarding, however, the author’s argument is unlikely to persuade such a step.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 376 350
No. of Characters: 1927 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.403 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.125 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.877 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.782 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.376 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.683 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 49, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Is
...e who skateboard not shop at the plaza? is another question based on the author&ap...
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Line 9, column 408, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a skateboard'.
Suggestion: who is a skateboard
...ot targeted towards the group of people who skateboard or shopkeepers my have some personal bi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 17, column 179, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ng area, but the author's argument doesnt support the restoration of business to ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, so, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2014.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 374.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38502673797 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06629006259 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564171122995 0.468620217663 120% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.164968094 57.8364921388 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.833333333 119.503703932 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.1666666667 23.324526521 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232287086726 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.092311233869 0.0743258471296 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749096908431 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136387937585 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.085479747367 0.0628817314937 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 14.3799401198 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.3550499002 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.32208582834 117% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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