"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
While it may be true that the number of shoppers in Central Plaza is plunging, the author statement does not provide a cogent case for the prohibition of skateboarding on the premises of Central Plaza. It is easy to understand the situation of shopkeepers in Central Plaza , but the author's supporting statement lacks evidence and a solid statistics, and thus does not consolidate for the acclaim he is stating.
To begin, According to Author's quote "There has been a steady decrease in the count of the shoppers in Central Plaza". Although the popularity of skateboard has increased dramatically, It is not clear, However that the popularity of skateboard has diminishing effect on the Central Plaza shoppers. Moreover, We don't know whether there has been
skateboarding in the plaza even before those period of dullness which is lasting since past two years. Since The Author did not mention the time during which skateboarding has been inchoate, the statement lacks concordance with its effects on plummeting counts of plaza shoppers. The Author can strengthen his idea by providing a solid basis on which the skateboarding affects the shoppers. For instance, The Statistics stating the time frame during which skateboarding has been started coercing with the fall in sales can be provided.
Additionally, The author states that the popularity of skateboard and its users within the plaza has increased dramatically which implicitly means a higher number of people if not shoppers, but skaters are visiting the plaza. while a increased number of visitors to the plaza means an increase in the count of sales, Author's statement is devoid of convincing argument for the drop in sales despite the increase in counts of masses onto the plaza. Is it the business owners who failed miserably in the traction of attracting the customers. Though there are larger number of skateboard users in the plaza, we do not know the way in which it is affecting the business or perhaps, are they skating on the hallway which hinders shoppers from shopping, we simply do not know.
Although statement asserts that many central plaza owners believes the skateboard users owes to their loss, it does not give a comprehensive statement about how the rest of the plaza owners think. Do they have some other reason for their sales drop?. There may be many external factors which may have played integral role in the sales, For example the rental price of the shops in the plaza may have surged which in-turn resulted in the increase in sales price, Conceivably decreasing the customer base. Moreover the statement lacks a connection between Central plaza's current littering, unseemly situation and the increase
in skateboard users.
Finally, Business owners believes prohibiting skateboarders will impact positively on their sales, but there has been no proof suggesting a rise on doing so is shown. Altogether, one would logically agree that the sales can even drop further as even lesser people will be coming since the plaza no longer supports skateboarding. Thus based upon the assertions stated above, unless a valid, reliable and consolidating statement is presented on the connection between the skateboarding and the business drop,
it would not be wise for the city to prohibit the skateboarding on the plaza. Even if the city does so it may render more harm than good to the business keepers of the Central Plaza.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 559 350
No. of Characters: 2794 1500
No. of Different Words: 250 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.862 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.998 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.745 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 193 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 150 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 114 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.421 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.732 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.571 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 273, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ituation of shopkeepers in Central Plaza , but the authors supporting statement la...
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Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...he Central Plaza shoppers. Moreover, We dont know whether there has been skateboar...
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Line 3, column 354, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ver, We dont know whether there has been skateboarding in the plaza even before t...
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Line 6, column 227, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...rs, but skaters are visiting the plaza. while a increased number of visitors to the p...
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Line 6, column 233, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...t skaters are visiting the plaza. while a increased number of visitors to the pla...
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Line 8, column 505, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...nceivably decreasing the customer base. Moreover the statement lacks a connection betwee...
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Line 8, column 624, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing, unseemly situation and the increase in skateboard users. Finally, Busines...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2870.0 2260.96107784 127% => OK
No of words: 558.0 441.139720559 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14336917563 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8233548585 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 204.123752495 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44623655914 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 878.4 705.55239521 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9012059234 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.5 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9 23.324526521 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395214713826 0.218282227539 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129094885888 0.0743258471296 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757890583493 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186001181255 0.128457276422 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0779690216056 0.0628817314937 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.3799401198 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 98.500998004 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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