Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the passage, the author argues that the prohibition of skateboarding in Central Plaza will increase the customers of businesses in the plaza. This is based on the premise that there is a decline of the number of shoppers in Central Plaza while the number of skateboard users was increased. However, on deeper analysis, it becomes apparent that certain relevant aspects have not been taken into consideration, leading to a number of mistaken assumptions and logical flaws.
One such flaw is the reference on the businesses’ owners that the decline of the customers is due to the incline of the number of skateboard users. Though the decrease on the number of customers may is the result of high prices, low quality products and terrible service of the enterprises in Central Plaza. In order to strengthen the argument, the author should present a research in the area which would ask the former shoppers, the reasons that make them to turn their back on the businesses of Central Plaza. Such a relevant research would transparently depict if the skateboarding is the main reason to prefer now other businesses.
Moreover, the author’s argument is incorrectly based on the assumption that the increase of litters and vandalism in the plaza is due to the number of skateboard users. The author does not present any relevant data to support his assumption and may the incline of litters in the area is due to the increased number of teenagers in the area who hang around in the plaza and are not skateboard users. To overcome this flaw, the argument should cite certain facts that have been monitored by security cameras of enterprises which demonstrate that the skateboards users are really throw out their litters on the ground and vandalize the businesses.
After closer examination of the passage presented, it is apparent that there are several logical flaws. The recommendations in the essay show how the argument may be strengthened and made more logically sound.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 328 350
No. of Characters: 1616 1500
No. of Different Words: 147 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.256 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.927 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.761 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.951 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.409 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.622 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
In the passage, the author argues that t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...istaken assumptions and logical flaws. One such flaw is the reference on the bu...
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Line 2, column 376, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...the argument, the author should present a research in the area which would ask the former ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...reason to prefer now other businesses. Moreover, the author’s argument is incor...
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Line 3, column 582, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'thrown'.
Suggestion: thrown
...e that the skateboards users are really throw out their litters on the ground and van...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... ground and vandalize the businesses. After closer examination of the passage ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, really, so, then, while, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1651.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 328.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03353658537 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84935409935 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457317073171 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3265219006 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.583333333 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338079703419 0.218282227539 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128500302387 0.0743258471296 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0991079504858 0.0701772020484 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19157977506 0.128457276422 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124255868264 0.0628817314937 198% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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