Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand our coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs.
The writer of the argument concludes that restoring time devoted to weather and local news to its former level can result in attracting more viewers to the program and also, increasing advertising revenues. However, this conclusion cannot be accepted as it is in that it rests on a number of premises for the support of which there is not enough evidence.
The first problem with the argument is that the writer assumes that canceling advertising contracts have happened because of devoting less time to weather and local news. However, there is no evidence that actually decreasing the amount of time allotted to weather and local news led to canceling advertising contracts. For example, maybe canceling contracts occurred because of inflation and financial problems that encumbers local businesses to invest in advertising. Or maybe, the local businesses canceled their policy to advertise on late-night programs because of not being economical for their advertising policies.
Even if there is evidence that decreasing time allotted to weather and local news have resulted in canceling late-night programs advertising contracts, there is not enough evidence that these canceled contracts resulted in losing advertising revenues. Maybe the revenues are declined because other advertising contracts of other programs during the day are canceled due to eliminating of other types of programs. Or maybe the advertising contracts during other shows have declined because the shows are not satisfying enough for the viewers; therefore, fewer viewers watch these shows, and the other advertising companies canceled their contract to impede further loss of money spent in advertising in shows that do not have enough audience.
Even assuming that late-night shows are canceled because of decreasing the program time during which the weather and local news are broadcasted, there is not enough evidence that restoring time devoted to weather and local news to former level will avoid losing further advertising revenues. Maybe other people are unsatisfied with other aspects of the channel and the complaints received from viewers are misleading. In this case, even after reverting the program to its former status, the local business might not trust that this change also brings back enough viewers of the station and thus, they will not sign contracts with the station.
In the final analysis, the writer's conclusion cannot be taken to be correct because, as it was shown in the body paragraph above, it depends on a number of premises not supported by sufficient concrete evidence. The conclusion can only be accepted if all the required evidence is provided.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK. need to argue:
During this period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news.
argument 3 -- OK
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samples:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 417 350
No. of Characters: 2208 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.519 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.295 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.644 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 105 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.786 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.311 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.409 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.651 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 500, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...r shows have declined because the shows are not satisfying enough for the viewers; therefore, fewe...
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Line 9, column 28, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
... station. In the final analysis, the writers conclusion cannot be taken to be correc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2253.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40287769784 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70739050885 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.407673860911 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 706.5 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.3219655527 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.928571429 119.503703932 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7857142857 23.324526521 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21428571429 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262351202513 0.218282227539 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111799720078 0.0743258471296 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103521812816 0.0701772020484 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167775928238 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114617979222 0.0628817314937 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 14.3799401198 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.3550499002 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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