Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The following argument is flawed for several reasons . Primarily, the argument is based on the unwarranted assumption that students can only prosper in Ballet if their teachers have experience in most prestigious ballet companies, rendering its main conclusion that Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child invalid.
The argument fails to provide any justification that other ballet schools in Elmtown has teacher with less experience in less prestigious companies. For one there can be possibility that other ballet schools also has teachers with experience in same companies but with experience of more number of years than teachers in Pirouettes ballet School. This makes teachers in other ballet school more qualified. Let us assume that teachers in other ballet school does not have experience in most prestigious companies. This does not tells that students will only prosper in Pirouettes Ballet school. Achieving success in a particular field depends more on an individual rather than his or her teacher. For instance, there are lot of ballet dancers who do not have experience in most prestigious schools but are showcasing their talent via Youtube and are famous. Some of these youtubers are one of the best in the world.
The argument also leaves many unanswered questions about the exact number of students who have gone to become professional dancers with top dance companies. It may be true that students from Pirouettes Ballet School have gone to become famous professional dancers, but this does not negate the fact that there may be other professional students who may be more talented than students who have learnt from pirouettes Ballet School. In fact, author should have given the facts and figures to prove his point. There are chance that out of twenty students in Pirouettes Ballet School only five have gone to become the professional dancers but in one of the other schools in Elmtown, out of twenty, nine have gone to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Finally, the argument claims without warrant that Pirouettes has the most intensive program in Elmtown. First of all, intensive is a vague word in this context. Some might think long practice hours as intensive and some might argue that intensive means more difficult steps to master. This depends on students preference and what they want from Ballet learning, full mastery in some of the moves or learn as many moves as possible but with average mastery. So, in this case also, author fails to provide sufficient information to help him conclude that Pirouettes Ballet School is the best in Elmtown.
Because the argument make several unwarranted assumptions, it fails to make a convincing case that Pirouettes Ballet School is the best in town and hence clear choice for any child.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 456 350
No. of Characters: 2309 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.621 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.064 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.565 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.17 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.551 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.172 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 53, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...g argument is flawed for several reasons . Primarily, the argument is based on the...
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Line 3, column 528, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'tell'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: tell
...st prestigious companies. This does not tells that students will only prosper in Piro...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 528, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'tell'
Suggestion: tell
...st prestigious companies. This does not tells that students will only prosper in Piro...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 302, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...ficult steps to master. This depends on students preference and what they want from Ball...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 379, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...t from Ballet learning, full mastery in some of the moves or learn as many moves as possibl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, may, so, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2360.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 456.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17543859649 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62869645575 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421052631579 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 714.6 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.8165274129 57.8364921388 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.475398992825 0.218282227539 218% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149007079181 0.0743258471296 200% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0916735137043 0.0701772020484 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26925372838 0.128457276422 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593034350732 0.0628817314937 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.