Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
The recommendation that the Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child is prone to many assumptions. The unstated assumptions are given in the paragraphs below.
Firstly, the claim that many students have become professional dancers in top dance companies has an underlying assumption that the number of students can, who became professional dancers in top companies, can also be very less in number. It is hight likely that the only a few of the total number of students in the schools are getting the chances to become professional dancers in the top companies. Therefore, the claim does not indicate that all the students, who are part of the school, are becoming professional dancer. Therefore, the prospective students must check the data about the alumni students of getting the chance to work in the top dance companies.
Secondly, the position that Pirouettes Ballet School has the most intensive program has an unstated assumption that this program is filtering out those students who have a special talent in dancing. It is highly likely that the program does not focusses on weak students. Moreover, it is possible that the newly admitted students will only get a chance to learn in the intensive programs if they are able to pass a certain test. If the student has failed in the exam then they can only join regular dancing programs. Therefore, the students must figure out all the unstated factors, for instance, qualifying a test to be able to take part in intensive program or having a minimum height of 160cm, before taking admission to the Pirouettes Ballet School.
Thirdly, the claim that they have the teachers who have danced in the most prestigious companies all over the world does not signify that the teachers can teach all kinds of the dance forms. It is possible that a student wants to learn and become an expert in a particular dancing style but the school does not have any teacher in the department who can guide the student with the particular form. Moreover, this claim does not indicate that the teachers, who have danced in the popular ballet companies, are the best tutors in the world of dancing. Therefore, the students taking admission must confirm that they will get the teachers who can teach their interest of dancing field.
Therefore, the new students must know how many students of the school have gone to become professional dancers in the top dance companies. Hence, all the above stated assumptions must be considered before taking admission in the Pirouettes Ballet School.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 426 350
No. of Characters: 2072 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.543 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.864 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.539 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.059 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.822 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.398 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.617 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 224, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: less
...cers in top companies, can also be very less in number. It is hight likely that the only a few...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 246, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'focus'
Suggestion: focus
...highly likely that the program does not focusses on weak students. Moreover, it is possi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 430, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...f they are able to pass a certain test. If the student has failed in the exam then...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2125.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 426.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9882629108 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63239336142 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.396713615023 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 638.1 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0672939572 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.0 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0588235294 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413112076636 0.218282227539 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145243900753 0.0743258471296 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104938494952 0.0701772020484 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258015816512 0.128457276422 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0674952399601 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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