Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
For evaluating the pros and cons of Pirouettes Ballet School further information is needed without which these recommendations cannot prove to be fruitful.
Firstly, there is no mention of other forms of dance being taught at the school. It is not stated whether Pirouettes is exclusively a ballet school or just a dance school with the flagship program as ballet. The recommendation also mentions that Pirouettes is the clear choice of any child. However, we do not know for sure, that these children want to train in ballet exclusively or have a preference for other forms of dance too. More information should be provided to draw conclusions.
Secondly, neither the fee structure nor the enrollment ratio of the students of Pirouettes has been provided. It is possible that children prefer Pirouettes over other dance schools as it is more economical instead of the faculty credentials. It is also possible that Pirouettes is a clear choice for most because it is easier to get admission in. We also do not know the admission criteria of Pirouettes. Maybe the children coming here are previously trained in ballet and the school only selects those who it thinks can become successful as professional dancers.
Thirdly, it is given that Pirouettes has the most intensive programme but we do not know if there are any other dance schools in Elmtown that provide a similar program at a competitive level. If there are no substitutes in the nearby surroundings, then Pirouettes by default becomes the prefferred choice for training. This has no bearing on the faculty experience and teachings.
Lastly, it is mentioned that most of Pirouettes students' have become professional dancers with top dance companies but no timeline is given. Maybe students who passed out from Pirouettes completed other specialised courses in ballet from elsewhere to land jobs in the industry.
Hence the above questions need to be answered to evaluate the recommendation.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 318 350
No. of Characters: 1604 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.223 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.044 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.89 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.706 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.596 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.595 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ewhere to land jobs in the industry. Hence the above questions need to be answered...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 318.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18238993711 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96173665669 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51572327044 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4954048397 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9411764706 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7058823529 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393768236609 0.218282227539 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119522646378 0.0743258471296 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.08999860528 0.0701772020484 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185948908017 0.128457276422 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0984339380845 0.0628817314937 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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