Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
According to the prompt Pirouettes Ballet school is great choice for any child. Prompt bases this upon the reasons that the program offered by the school is most intensive, teachers have dances in most prestigious ballet companies and their school has also had students who went on to become professional dancers with leading dance companies. However, before this argument can be evaluated answer to three questions are required to be collected and analyzed.
Firstly, does teachers involvement with most prestigious ballet companies ensures that they will be good in teaching children as well? Prompt assumes that since teachers of Pirouettes Ballet School have danced in most renown ballet companies all around globe they will be suitable for all students. Perhaps, it can be the the case that teachers are so advanced that a fledgling student finds it hard to keep up with the pace with which these teachers conduct classes. Moreover, it can be the case that teachers themselves remain busy as they have to travel around globe with ballet companies and thereby spending ephemeral time with students. If any of the above case comes true, then the claim made in the prompt that Pirouettes Ballet School is clear choice doesn't hold water.
Secondly, does school had any formidable role in making many of its student to become professional dancers and that too with top dance companies? As it is probable that students who became professional dancers had some additional help which made in possible for them to alleviate in their dancing career. Additionally, it can be the case that many students who went on to become successful were inherently talented and school did little to enhance it. If such is the case, then asserting that school was responsible in making many of its students professional dancers is considerably flawed.
Thirdly, is program offered by Pirouettes Ballet school sufficient for any child? Prompt reasons that the school has most intensive program and thus it should be clear choice for any student but this might not be the case. Perhaps children require various different program according to several factors like level of knowledge, time they can give per week etc. These all factors might play important role in deciding whether intensive program touted by Pirouettes Ballet school would be suitable for a child or not. Thus saying that intensive program is enough to make people their school is not correct.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now is completely flawed due to its reliance on several unstated assumptions. If answer to above stated questions are provided and perhaps a systematic study is conducted to assess their validity, then the claim made in the prompt can be properly judged.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 449 350
No. of Characters: 2252 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.603 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.016 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.519 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.944 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.618 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.591 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 319, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...le for all students. Perhaps, it can be the the case that teachers are so advanced that...
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Line 3, column 319, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...le for all students. Perhaps, it can be the the case that teachers are so advanced that...
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Line 3, column 761, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...irouettes Ballet School is clear choice doesnt hold water. Secondly, does school ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2299.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 448.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13169642857 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57775198291 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459821428571 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8508298867 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5789473684 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26315789474 5.70786347227 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.42185777432 0.218282227539 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149080297697 0.0743258471296 201% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124831077075 0.0701772020484 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234454403368 0.128457276422 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138541914541 0.0628817314937 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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