Recent incursions by deep-sea fishermen into the habitat of the Madagascan shrimp have led to a significant reduction in the species population. With the breeding season fast approaching, the number of shrimp should soon begin to increase. Nonetheless, the population should not return to the levels before the fishing boats arrived. Because this trend is expected to continue over the next several years, the Madagascan shrimp will quickly become an endangered species.
Enroachement into deeper regions of the sea has largely deterioated the population of the Madagascan shrimp. Such activity is expected to continue for several years and the Madagascan shrimps are mostly likely to be affected and endangered.
Such an argument lies on several unstated assumptions about the specie. One just do not know the actual reason why the polpulation of the Madagascan shrimps are fast dwindling. With industriliastion and oil trenchement activity in boom these days, shrimp could be non-adaptive to the new environemnts and could be well affected by the unfavorable conditions.
One must be well aware of the food chain of the ecosysytem. Shrimps largely rely on smaller fish who just do not have the capability to survive and dwell at the surfacial levels. With fishermen already approaching the deeper regions, the smaller fish are inherently the part of the fishing activity and this could have been the major cuase for detoriation of the Madagascan shrimp population.
Generally shrimps are the most dlecious and favroite variety of sea food among the populace. With mainland waters drying up and shrimps being scarce as a result, Madagascan shrimp has become the most likely prey and the only source of income to the fishermen. With rains and seasonal change approaching, mainland shrimps are expected to become etxant with much less stress on the Madagascan shrimp settlements.
However, if fishermen become greedy and follow the reckless practice of the fishing of Madagscan shrimps, it is most likely to endanger the species.
Anyway, the argument so made relies much on the unstated presumptions and id most likely to fall short due to above mentioned reasons and explanations.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 274 350
No. of Characters: 1411 1500
No. of Different Words: 146 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.069 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.15 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.794 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.077 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.33 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.385 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.368 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.682 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.062 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, however, if, so, well, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 13.6137724551 7% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 3.0 28.8173652695 10% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1451.0 2260.96107784 64% => OK
No of words: 274.0 441.139720559 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29562043796 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88174452184 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547445255474 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2644534292 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.615384615 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0769230769 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.23076923077 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243449178075 0.218282227539 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901303054208 0.0743258471296 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708121448606 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113409643221 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0840988272041 0.0628817314937 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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