A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about healthful eating. Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
At first glance, the conclusion of the potential popularity is sound. however, a close examination of the arguments and evidence given in the article is mostly specious. To bridge the gaps and make the argument cogent, the speaker needs to address the following questions.
Despite the evidence that the consumption of seafood dishes has increased significantly during the last five years, it still remains obscure that how many dishes the residents consume every year. The significant increase could be explained by the possibility that few people used to consume seafood dishes five years ago, thus, a slight increase in the consumption leads to a relatively large increase in the ratio. before we could get access to the amount of seafood consumption, the size of the potential market is undetermined.
Moreover, before citing the conclusion of a national survey, we must question whether such a survey applies to the local market, i.e. bay city. it could be equally possible that two-income families in other parts of the country obscure the situation of such families in bay city. In addition, whether the survey reflects a long-term preference is questionable. such a result could only be the temporal proclivity, owing to the emergence of advertisement of healthy life and the proliferation of application which can order food on the cell phone. In addition, it could be equally possible that the overload work engendered by the boost of the economy, which renders workers have not time to cook in their homes. such a situation will disappear after the economy return to normal. before more details about the survey is provided, I remain skeptical about the result of the survey.
Granted the validity of the survey's result in bay city. The large percentage of two-income families do not directly lead to the fact that such a family will consume seafood dishes. Despite they eat significantly fewer home-cooked dishes, they may not choose to eat seafood due to its relatively high prices. The concentration on health does increase the possibility to consume healthy seafood. however, there are also varieties of healthy food that is much cheaper than seafood. hence, we cannot presume they have the ability to consume seafood in a large amount without information about their average income. Furthermore, we cannot determine whether these families are fond of seafood. Perhaps they do not like seafood or have never eaten it. Even if a majority of the two-income families are in favor of seafood, the article provides no information about the percentage of such families. it could possibly be that due to traditions in this city, few families are two-income ones. hence, the size of the market is still opaque. As for the cost, the speaker still provides no information. possibly the cost is so high that any investment into seafood is not reasonable.
In conclusion, the desire to make profits in seafood is understandable, however, the conclusion should not be hastily made. The speaker should investigate the current size of the seafood market and the desire as well as the capability of the local residents to consume seafood more directly to get a clear picture of the potential market. Additionally, the cost of the venture needs more thorough consideration.
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Essay evaluation report
also need to argue:
Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 534 350
No. of Characters: 2679 1500
No. of Different Words: 234 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.807 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.017 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.755 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 207 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 160 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.85 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.143 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
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Suggestion: Before
...relatively large increase in the ratio. before we could get access to the amount of se...
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Suggestion: It
...ies to the local market, i.e. bay city. it could be equally possible that two-inco...
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Suggestion: Such
...a long-term preference is questionable. such a result could only be the temporal pro...
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Suggestion: Such
...s have not time to cook in their homes. such a situation will disappear after the ec...
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Suggestion: Before
...ear after the economy return to normal. before more details about the survey is provid...
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Suggestion: However
...possibility to consume healthy seafood. however, there are also varieties of healthy fo...
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Suggestion: Hence
...food that is much cheaper than seafood. hence, we cannot presume they have the abilit...
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Suggestion: It
... about the percentage of such families. it could possibly be that due to tradition...
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Line 10, column 895, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...out the percentage of such families. it could possibly be that due to traditions in this city,...
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Suggestion: Hence
...city, few families are two-income ones. hence, the size of the market is still opaque...
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Suggestion: Possibly
... speaker still provides no information. possibly the cost is so high that any investment...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, thus, well, as for, in addition, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 55.5748502994 137% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2758.0 2260.96107784 122% => OK
No of words: 534.0 441.139720559 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16479400749 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84108751268 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462546816479 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 882.0 705.55239521 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.22255489022 261% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.3112244816 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1034482759 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4137931034 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48275862069 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165857485898 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433952765962 0.0743258471296 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484280295349 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0904902403339 0.128457276422 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764935122259 0.0628817314937 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 98.500998004 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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