"A recent study of Dura-Socks customers suggests that our company is wasting the money it spends on its patented Endure manufacturing process, which ensures that our socks are strong enough to last for two years. We have always advertised our use of the Endure process, but the new study shows that despite the socks' durability, our customers, on average, actually purchase new Dura-Socks every three months. Furthermore, customers surveyed in our largest market—northeastern United States cities—say that they most value Dura-Socks' stylish appearance and availability in many colors. These findings suggest that we can increase our profits by discontinuing use of the Endure manufacturing process."
The argument claims that the recent study of Dura-Socks customer suggests that the our company is wasting money and spends on patented endure manufacturing process, so socks durability increase. And recent study suggests that the customer change his socks every three months, so for increase profits company should discontinuing this manufacturing process. Stated in this way The argument fails to mention several key factors bases on which it could be evaluated. The conclusion relies on an assumption for which there is no better evidence. So, the argument can be unsubstantiated. However, little scrutiny of the evidence reveals little credible support for the author's argument.
First of all, The argument readily assumes that the some customers suggests that company is waste the money and spends on its patented Endure manufacturing process. This is merely assumption without much solid ground. For example, here mention that the customers suggest but it does not specify how many customers suggests to company waste money on its manufacturing process. It may be possible if out of 100 customers only 30 customers suggest this suggestion. The argument lot more convincing if it was explicitly defined numbers of customers who suggest this review.
Second, The argument claims that the new study shows that despite the socks' durability, customers, actually purchase new Dura-Socks every three months. This is again weak and unsupported claims as the argument does not demonstrate any clear evidence that how many customers change his socks every three months, also the author fails to mention that the ratio of the customer for study. If the argument had provided the study scenario than it more plausible.
Third, The customers surveyed at largest market—northeastern United States cities—say that they most value Dura-Socks' stylish appearance and availability in many colors. here also author assumes that the Dura-Socks is most valuable. if author mention some proof for valuable socks than it more plausible. However, little scrutiny of the evidence reveals little credible support fot the author's argument with respect to several critical factors and raises several skeptical questions. For example how many customers suggest this review?, how we can said that Dura-Socks is more valuable? Without answer of this question, the reader left with the impression that the claims made by the author are more wishful rather than substantive.
In conclusion, The author's argument unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, The author must provide better concrete evidence. It could be considerably strengthened if the author mentions all relevant facts. In order to asses the merit of certain situation it is essential to have good knowledge about contributing factors. So, the result the author's argument unsubstantiated and open for debate.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the arguments are not right on the point. Here goes a sample:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 443 350
No. of Characters: 2367 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.588 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.343 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.694 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 196 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 149 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.261 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.647 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.739 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.528 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'our'?
Suggestion: the; our
...dy of Dura-Socks customer suggests that the our company is wasting money and spends on ...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 665, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...reveals little credible support for the authors argument. First of all, The argumen...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 54, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
..., The argument readily assumes that the some customers suggests that company is wast...
^^^^
Line 5, column 72, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'socks'' or 'sock's'?
Suggestion: socks'; sock's
...at the new study shows that despite the socks durability, customers, actually purchas...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 388, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...at the ratio of the customer for study. If the argument had provided the study sce...
^^
Line 7, column 172, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Here
...arance and availability in many colors. here also author assumes that the Dura-Sock...
^^^^
Line 7, column 205, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...olors. here also author assumes that the Dura-Socks is most valuable. if author m...
^^
Line 7, column 236, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... that the Dura-Socks is most valuable. if author mention some proof for valuable ...
^^
Line 7, column 389, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...reveals little credible support fot the authors argument with respect to several critic...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 551, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'say'
Suggestion: say
...tomers suggest this review?, how we can said that Dura-Socks is more valuable? Witho...
^^^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...more wishful rather than substantive. In conclusion, The authors argument unpe...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 21, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...substantive. In conclusion, The authors argument unpersuasive as it stands. To ...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 354, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ontributing factors. So, the result the authors argument unsubstantiated and open for d...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, third, for example, in conclusion, first of all, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2433.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 441.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51700680272 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86974867337 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471655328798 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 736.2 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.095652506 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.32 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.64 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.12 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291412046696 0.218282227539 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0852183487726 0.0743258471296 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115394365202 0.0701772020484 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165523212044 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105049983712 0.0628817314937 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.44 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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