As a result of numerous consumer complaints of dizziness and nausea, Promofoods requested that eight million cans of tuna be returned for testing last year.
Promofoods concluded that the cans did not, after all, contains chemicals that posed health risk. This conclusion is based on the fact that the chemists from promofoods tested samples of the recalled cans and found that, of the eight chemicals most commonly blamed for causing symptoms of dizziness and nausea, five were not found in any of the tested cans.
Chemists did find the three remaining suspected chemicals are naturally found in all other kinds of canned foods.
This argument is based on the complaints from the consumers of the feeling of dizziness and nausea. The author is saying the Promofods have tested the eight million cans of Tuna and did not find any chemicals creating health risk. To explain this , author has presented some claims which has not presented any solid evidence.
Author has mentioned that, Promofoods has done testing on the eight million Tuna cans last year, but failed to provide the actual results of testing as an evidence of his claim. Also, the number eight millions , is this value represents the total number of Tuna cans sold? Author should have mentioned in the proper way with proofs, so that the number of Tuna cans requested back for testing is justifiable. The Promofoods concluded after testing the Tuna cans, that they did not contain the health risk chemicals. Well this is the conclusion from the Promofoods only. This can not be considered as a fact or truth as it can be considered as a biased conclusion from Promofoods's testing labs. Also it is mentioned that the sample of Tuna cans are tested and based on these testing results the Promofoods have claimed that amongst 8 of the harmful chemicals 5 of these have no health risk factor found for humans. This is not a perfect way to test the contaminated food. If Promofoods have requested eight million back then they should have tested all those. The word samples of Tuna cans do not present an exact number of tested cans. If the number of cans tested are near to the number requested back or why particularly some samples are selected, was it based on some research? Author should have presented all these statistics and evidences to make the claims more relaible and convincing.
In addition to these claims, the author has generalized that 5 out of 8 chemicals have found not causing nausea and dizziness. However, author should have considered about the chemical reaction of these 5 chemicals or any other chemicals other than these 8 blamed chemicals. The author's claim failed to establish this relation ship which weakness the argument. There is more generalization of other three chemicals to be found in all other canned food items, for which they are are not considered risky. Here also author should have considered the fact that all the canned foods are not made of same food items. He has failed to mention the name of the canned foods with which he is comparing these assumptions. This generalization has failed the authors claim.
In the end it can be said that all these claims made by author are based on the mere assumption that the eight chemicals which are blamed are not responsible for causing nausea and dizziness. The proofs of test results, the statistics and evidences found and considered by Promofoods to reach to the conclusion should have been mentioned to avoid the thought of biased sampling and testing . The claim of that three chemicals found in other canned foods should have mentioned with what is the effect of those three chemicals with Tuna , separately and mixed.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 520 350
No. of Characters: 2480 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.775 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.769 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.478 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.98 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.462 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 247, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ls creating health risk. To explain this , author has presented some claims which ...
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Line 3, column 210, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s claim. Also, the number eight millions , is this value represents the total numb...
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Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Tuna cans requested back for testing is justifiable. The Promofoods concluded af...
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Line 3, column 695, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...nclusion from Promofoodss testing labs. Also it is mentioned that the sample of Tuna...
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Line 3, column 972, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...fect way to test the contaminated food. If Promofoods have requested eight million...
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Line 5, column 475, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: are
...other canned food items, for which they are are not considered risky. Here also author ...
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Line 7, column 390, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...e thought of biased sampling and testing . The claim of that three chemicals found...
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Line 7, column 535, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ffect of those three chemicals with Tuna , separately and mixed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, well, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2528.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 520.0 441.139720559 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86153846154 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53500635327 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.373076923077 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 757.8 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3331749371 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.12 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.04 5.70786347227 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362844081728 0.218282227539 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118634079895 0.0743258471296 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0915715995422 0.0701772020484 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230471496555 0.128457276422 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102237227579 0.0628817314937 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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