As a result of numerous consumer complaints of dizziness and nausea, Promofoods requested that eight million cans of tuna be returned for testing last year. Promofoods concluded that the cans did not, after all, contain chemicals that posed a health risk. This conclusion is based on the fact that the chemists from Promofoods tested samples of the recalled cans and found that, of the eight chemicals most commonly blamed for causing symptoms of dizziness and nausea, five were not found in any of the tested cans. The chemists did find that the three remaining suspected chemicals are naturally found in all other kinds of canned foods.
The argument states that there are several complains about dizziness and nausea, and as a result, the company Promofoods investigated sample from eight millions tons Tuna from the company asked to return. The author said that the investigation results confirmed that the chemical contents in Tuna don’t have any risk although that Tuna has two chemicals are suspected to do so. The author of this arguement has a lot of questions marks that should be answered. First how the company did reache this coclusion that there is correlation between Tuna and the consumers’ complains. Second, how many complains ddi the company receive compared to the total number of consumers? Third, the two chemical remained in the company’s Tuna, How milligrams are used, is there any investigation has been done to investiagte whether this quantity is safe or not? The author should provide us with all the missing information to make his argument persuasive enough to take it into account.
First, if we look at the first missing information, how the company did reach that the Tuna is the reason for the consumer’s complains? They maybe had such symptoms from other factors such as anemia or other disease cause dizziness. Thus, the author should illustrate how the company did find that the consumers’ complains could be from their product and then they withdrawed eight million can from the market.
Secondly, upon the previous question, if there is a correlation between the Tuna and the costomers’ complains and the company confirmed that by somehow, the author doesn’t mention how many costomers compalined compared to the total number of the compny’s costomers? The answer for this question is crucial to see if the number of the complains is significant or not. The number of complains perhaps don’t exceed one or two percent which doesn’t indicate for any remarkable relationship between the complains and the Tuna. Thus, if the number is such small that means the conclusion drawn in the original argument doesn’t hold water.
Third, the argument mentioned that Tuna has two of five suspected chemicals which maybe cause dizziness and nuasea. However, the author overlooked to illustrate how milligrams used from those two chemicals and to what extent this quantity is safe. As the quantity is important and perhaps cuase the risk of appearing such symptons, the author should provide the reader with all details wether the chemicals existance is safe or not, otherwise, this information do nothing to be persuasive.
In conclusion, the argument as stands is considerably flawed as the author relies on unwarranted assumptions. Thus, the author should provide us with more information and more answers, otherwise, the argument is remarkably unconvinced.
Comments
e-rater score report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 16 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 448 350
No. of Characters: 2251 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.601 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.025 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.681 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.579 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.802 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.789 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.353 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 36, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'severals'?
Suggestion: severals
The argument states that there are several complains about dizziness and nausea, a...
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Line 1, column 380, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...s two chemicals are suspected to do so. The author of this arguement has a lot of q...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thus, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2336.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 443.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27313769752 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80886847562 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458239277652 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 16.0 8.76447105788 183% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1936968375 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.947368421 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3157894737 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18959369159 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610785132928 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05174266618 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0979617797278 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711606157145 0.0628817314937 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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