"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
The Director of Buckingham college think that the college should build new hostels as in upcoming years numbers of student who will get admitted t Buckingham college will be double.This argument contain many flaws and this is an illogical argument.As the director did not important information a which misguide the readers.Therefor entire argument is not convincing and unsound
In starting, The director said that enrollment is growing and based on current trend will double in next 50 years, which lead to inadequate numbers of dormitories,that are existing, for accommodating the enrolled students. This argument is illlogical.May be this is not true in upcoming 50 years numbers of student who will get enrolled to college might be decrease due to any reason. Also, the increase in number of students doesn't imply that number of dormitories required will also increase.they might stay off-Campus or the town might be their native place, which leads to no requirement of the housing service. so this argument have not proper vision and it mislead to readers.
In middle, argument mentions that the average rent for an apartment in the town has risen over past years which will make it un-affordable for students looking for housing. In an ideal market, if the average rent of apartment has increased then, the fees for the dormitories will also increase. also if average rent of apartments are high that doesn't imply that there are no apartments will low rent. also, it is possible that in certain area of the town the rent is very high whereas the rent in other areas are relatively low and cost-effective, which leads to an unclear picture of average rent in the town.
In last, author mentions that attractiveness of a dormitory will lead to increase in enrollment numbers, which in turn will create the need of more dormitories. but the basic concept, that the student will enroll in a college just on the basis of appearance of the housing services is absurd. students enroll in college based on various other factors like subjects available, job opportunities, ranking of college etc. the attractiveness of dormitories would be most likely last factor for a student while choosing a college.
In summary, the argument is flawed and therefore unconvincing. it could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts and information. In order to assess the merits of certain situation it is essential to have full knowledge of all the contributing factors.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 416 350
No. of Characters: 2050 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.516 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.928 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.783 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 41.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.34 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.717 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the college should build new hostels as in upcoming years numbers of student who...
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Line 1, column 100, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...hould build new hostels as in upcoming years numbers of student who will get admitte...
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Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...ted t Buckingham college will be double.This argument contain many flaws and this is...
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Line 1, column 197, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'contains'.
Suggestion: contains
...am college will be double.This argument contain many flaws and this is an illogical arg...
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Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...flaws and this is an illogical argument.As the director did not important informat...
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Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...flaws and this is an illogical argument.As the director did not important informat...
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Line 1, column 325, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: Therefor
...nformation a which misguide the readers.Therefor entire argument is not convincing and u...
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Line 5, column 163, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , that
...ead to inadequate numbers of dormitories,that are existing, for accommodating the enr...
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Line 5, column 252, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: May
...d students. This argument is illlogical.May be this is not true in upcoming 50 year...
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Line 5, column 256, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...udents. This argument is illlogical.May be this is not true in upcoming 50 years n...
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Line 5, column 427, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...lso, the increase in number of students doesnt imply that number of dormitories requir...
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Line 5, column 617, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... no requirement of the housing service. so this argument have not proper vision an...
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Line 5, column 664, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'misleads'?
Suggestion: misleads
... argument have not proper vision and it mislead to readers. In middle, argument me...
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Line 9, column 296, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...for the dormitories will also increase. also if average rent of apartments are high ...
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Line 9, column 296, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
...for the dormitories will also increase. also if average rent of apartments are high ...
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Line 9, column 345, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...verage rent of apartments are high that doesnt imply that there are no apartments will...
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Line 9, column 402, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
... there are no apartments will low rent. also, it is possible that in certain area of...
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Line 13, column 162, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...ll create the need of more dormitories. but the basic concept, that the student wil...
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Line 13, column 294, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Students
...ance of the housing services is absurd. students enroll in college based on various othe...
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Line 17, column 64, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...t is flawed and therefore unconvincing. it could be considerably strengthened if t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, whereas, while, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 409.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16381418093 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98655832191 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484107579462 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 125.934727361 57.8364921388 218% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 140.8 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2666666667 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86666666667 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220596726452 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632526190801 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764811794175 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114620833364 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0799522742031 0.0628817314937 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 12.3882235529 238% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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