The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area Although only a small percentage of the land wi

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“The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population.”

In the above petition, it is concluded that permitting "The Smith Co-operation" land for development would led to destruction of the wildlife sanctuary of the area. To provide support, following facts has been cited, that nearly 300 bird populations currently live in the area will extinct if development is permitted. Another support provide to the final conclusion is that an increase in tourist population will destroy the wildlife. But the petition is based on many assumptions which if true weakens the conclusion of the petition as a whole. Following are the assumptions.

Firstly, for the first evidence that although small percent of land given for the construction, it will damage the 300 bird species. It assumes that the bird species are visible only in that area where construction is permitted, birds are cannot find places where there's no human population in the sanctuary. It also assumes that the bird species cannot change their place for shelter and only stays where construction is provided. If birds are able to change their place where they can find peace and no disturbance, then there will not be any harm to their lives. If it is true then it weakens the conclusion that construction will hamper the bird population.

It also assumes that construction will be undertaken hastily and no prevention measures will be taken which will damage the species of birds. If construction is allowed with a proper rules and regulations where any minimal damage to species can check the progress of construction, then construction will be undertaken with proper care and without any damage to the birds. It further assumes that after the construction is done, the increase in tourist population will destroy birds. It assumes that tourist will not be there for helping birds or any measures to feed will not be taken, instead they will harm the birds. What if people started loving birds and they started to provide new homes also feeding them with healthy food so that they can stay healthy throughout their life? It can be possible that with the increase in tourist will in turn increase the outsprings of birds and making a healthy place for all birds to live.

In conclusion, the reasons cited in the petitions for preventing the construction, although has considerable reasons but there are many assumptions which if true will weaken the final conclusion. They petition further requires more evaluations and more evidence to avoid construction. Without any, one cannot assume that it would always harm the species of birds.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, so, then, in conclusion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 419.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10501193317 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8096136044 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412887828162 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 641.7 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.899406542 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.578947368 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0526315789 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47368421053 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156866690231 0.218282227539 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543233168493 0.0743258471296 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549755114221 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101472321972 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545356098051 0.0628817314937 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 419 350
No. of Characters: 2084 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.524 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.974 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.674 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.053 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.33 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.526 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.521 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5