Techno corporation is our top pick for the investment this term. We urge all our clients to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed a stellite technology has been approvd by the FTA to compete with current satellite provider. The company is techno corporation. A consumer survey last year indicated that over eighty percent of the respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not monopoly.Thus , the new venture of technocorporation into satellite televsion will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now.
The newsletter is advising its clients to invest in Techcorporation as it is their top pick for investment and this investment will prove to be highly profitable. Although a cursory view might give us a feel for this claim. A rigorous examination proves that the authenticity of the statements are dubious.
First, the newsletter is offering advice to the investor. But the credibility of this newsletter's advice is not shown. What kind of people did it use for doing a research behind this Techcorporation? Were they experienced investors? These kind of questions raise doubts regarding the reliability of the newsletter's advice. The news letter continues saying that the company got approval by FTA for competing with the current satellite provider. But just an approval to compete is by no means a justification for a sure shot success. It is just a preliminary sign indicating that the company is at par with the minimum benchmarks that are required and nothing more.
Secondly, the newsletter's advice relies on the survey that was conducted a year back regarding the people who were dissatisfied with their current provider. But the authenticity of the survey is nowhere mentioned. Also on what parameters did the survey happen are also missing. It might have been possible that the survey was restricted to a limited number of people living in outskirts, where it is really hard to get a good reception due to the climatic conditions. In that case no matter who the satellite provides is, nothing is going to help. It also might be possible that the device that people are using is outmoded which resulted into their dissatisfaction. In which case they are at fault and not the current satellite provider.
Continuing on the loop holes of the survey, it states that people want to switch to other provider if the industry weren't a monopoly. There might be several other providers apart from Techcorporation which are the next options for the dissatisfied people. It is imprudent to conclude that they will only switch to Techcorporation. And even if some of them do switch to Techcorporation, what is the gaurantee that Techcorporation will provide a satisfactory experience to the people? It's just an assumption without any facts to back it up.
So by the above reasoning it is clear that the advice that the newsletter gave to it's investors would have been more credible if the required information regarding the whereabouts of the survey and also Techcorporation were also provided along with the suggestion to invest in Techcorporation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 87, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'newsletters'' or 'newsletter's'?
Suggestion: newsletters'; newsletter's
...e investor. But the credibility of this newsletters advice is not shown. What kind of peopl...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...hat kind of people did it use for doing a research behind this Techcorporation? Were they ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 234, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...ation? Were they experienced investors? These kind of questions raise doubts regarding the...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 304, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'newsletters'' or 'newsletter's'?
Suggestion: newsletters'; newsletter's
...doubts regarding the reliability of the newsletters advice. The news letter continues sayin...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 15, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'newsletters'' or 'newsletter's'?
Suggestion: newsletters'; newsletter's
...ired and nothing more. Secondly, the newsletters advice relies on the survey that was co...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 215, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ity of the survey is nowhere mentioned. Also on what parameters did the survey happe...
^^^^
Line 7, column 116, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...witch to other provider if the industry werent a monopoly. There might be several othe...
^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'really', 'regarding', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'apart from', 'kind of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.230598669623 0.25644967241 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.186252771619 0.15541462614 120% => OK
Adjectives: 0.059866962306 0.0836205057962 72% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0465631929047 0.0520304965353 89% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0465631929047 0.0272364105082 171% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.119733924612 0.125424944231 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0554323725055 0.0416121511921 133% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.13372337378 2.79052419416 112% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0376940133038 0.026700313972 141% => OK
Particles: 0.00221729490022 0.001811407834 122% => OK
Determiners: 0.139689578714 0.113004496875 124% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0177383592018 0.0255425247493 69% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0266075388027 0.0127820249294 208% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2554.0 2731.13054187 94% => OK
No of words: 421.0 446.07635468 94% => OK
Chars per words: 6.06650831354 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.349168646081 0.378187486979 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.261282660333 0.287650121315 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.211401425178 0.208842608468 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.1567695962 0.135150697306 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13372337378 2.79052419416 112% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 207.018472906 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486935866983 0.469332199767 104% => OK
Word variations: 53.704319986 52.1807786196 103% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.039408867 120% => OK
Sentence length: 17.5416666667 23.2022227129 76% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0323412316 57.7814097925 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.416666667 141.986410481 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5416666667 23.2022227129 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.724660767414 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 43.6699326999 51.9672348444 84% => OK
Elegance: 1.45238095238 1.8405768891 79% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397902750637 0.441005458295 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0993870376961 0.135418324435 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.071443318783 0.0829849096947 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.496065989897 0.58762219726 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.179391854898 0.147661913831 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15053282001 0.193483328276 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783417752027 0.0970749176394 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.459612019689 0.42659136922 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0580769874694 0.0774707102158 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291731112869 0.312017818177 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444872283484 0.0698173142475 64% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.87684729064 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.82512315271 187% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 14.657635468 109% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
---------------------
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
---------------------
Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.