There is now evidence that the relaxed pace of life in small towns promotes better health and greater longevity than does the hectic pace of life in big cities. Businesses in the small town of Leeville report fewer days of sick leave taken by individual workers than do businesses in the nearby large city of Masonton. Furthermore, Leeville has only one physician for its one thousand residents, but in Masonton the proportion of physicians to residents is five times as high. Finally, the average age of Leeville residents is significantly higher than that of Masonton residents. These findings suggest that the relaxed pace of life in Leeville allows residents to live longer, healthier lives.
The arguments claims that the only reason of higher average of age in Leeville town in comparison to the city of Masonton is the relaxed pace of life in Leeville. Although longevity depends on multiple factors, the author argues that the relaxed pace of life in small towns reduces sick leave reports that reveals their healthier lives. The author fallaciously neglected to ponder over alternative explanations and misleadingly considers the relaxed pace of life as the main source of longer life. Therefore, the argument is refutable.
Firstly, the pace of life in different towns cannot be evaluated by the number of reports of sick leave in business section. The modern lifestyle in cities creates conditions that people may get sick which are not related to stress, anxiety or pace of life at all. For instance, the large city of Masonton definitely experiences a myriad of cars that cause to have a low-quality air. Air pollution contributes to various maladies such as asthma that may prevent people to be present at work regularly. Furthermore, residents of towns have easy access to organic food, fruit, meat and etc. Consuming healthy food and following a healthy diet can significantly decrease the possibility of illness.
Secondly, regular exercise is another factor that ends up into a healthy life and greater average of age. People who live in town may have a garden or a lot of parks around them to do exercises, while residents of cities should pay expensive gyms to acquire a chance of regular exercises. The mentioned fact may decline the number of people who attend to gyms. Furthermore, maybe the number of reports of sick leave is lower in Leeville because people of towns are used to follow their traditional remedies for illnesses such as regular exercises, herbal tea or self-made potions. Thus, there exist numerous alternative explanations for longevity that author neglects to evaluate.
Following that, as stated in the argument, there is only one physician at the Leeville town. On the contrary, the number of physicians at the Masonton is five times high. This fact does not imply that the number of patients who visit a physician is high at the Masonton because of rapid pace of life. One can conclude that, the number of doctors at the city is higher at a city rather than a small town reasonably since the population of these two areas are disparate. Perhaps, the majority of visitors of Masonton doctors are from nearby town who are deprived of hospitals and physicians.
To recapitulate, longevity is a final result caused by multiple sources. The author cannot easily depend on the fact that the pace of life makes changes in the average age of people. The above-mentioned explanations may have effect on the longevity and they need to be considered to further evaluate the final conclusion of the author. Otherwise, the statement is rife with unexamined suppositions.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Finally, the average age of Leeville residents is significantly higher than that of Masonton residents.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 483 350
No. of Characters: 2376 1500
No. of Different Words: 230 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.688 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.919 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.706 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 184 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.918 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.565 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.29 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.506 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'claim'.
Suggestion: claim
The arguments claims that the only reason of higher average ...
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Line 2, column 580, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...asy access to organic food, fruit, meat and etc. Consuming healthy food and following a ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 55.5748502994 148% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2429.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 483.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02898550725 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78563561581 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490683229814 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 802.8 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4518518115 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.208333333 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.125 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.29166666667 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287384778342 0.218282227539 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077346541901 0.0743258471296 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862705935242 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163411194404 0.128457276422 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0930877915439 0.0628817314937 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 98.500998004 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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