Topic ::
The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants.
"Recently, butter has been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. This change, however, has had little impact on our customers. In fact, only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers do not distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The claim that butter can be safely replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake restaurants since a miniscuse amount of customers has complained when server the replacement containing margarine. The author also claims that customers either don't distinguish butter from margarine or use "butter" term for margarine itself. On a casual read,the argument looks persusive to readers,but a closer inspection of the premises brings out certain loopholes. The author needs to address these assumptions with reliable and atrogn evidences for strengthening the claim.
Firstly,the author states that the replacement has very little impact on the customers since only 2 percent of them has complained ,which is minuscle. However,this basis of the claim is weak and unreliable. First of all,the author should have made customers aware of the change and then havd taken the feedback. Additonially,it may be possible that many compalints went unnoticed because either the customers didn't come again or they may have bad health effects after long time of eating margarine.Therefore,the author should provide a more credible survey on customer's feedback and should also take into account study done over long time period for tracking any long term effect of margarine.
Secondly,the author has not provided any substantial information about the effects of maragrine on human health. He should provide a reliable scientific study providing exact info about the health effects of margarine on different age groups. It is highly likely that margarine may harm human health incisively which can only be tracked in long time. Also,the author should also provide a study on the health status of their regular customers to track issues with daily margarine intake.
In conclusion,the argument has several weak points which cannot be overlooked easilty. The author needs to provide reliable and detailed evidence about effects of margarine on human health in order to bolster the argument.Additionally,the author needs to increase the credibilty of its premises by taking customers' feedback after making them aware of the replacement.This will highly support the author's recommendation.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 345 350
No. of Characters: 1798 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.31 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.212 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.638 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.643 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.1 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.379 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.566 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 236, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...uthor also claims that customers either dont distinguish butter from margarine or us...
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Line 1, column 344, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...m for margarine itself. On a casual read,the argument looks persusive to readers,but...
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Line 1, column 384, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
...,the argument looks persusive to readers,but a closer inspection of the premises bri...
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Line 5, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...or strengthening the claim. Firstly,the author states that the replacement has ...
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Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ce only 2 percent of them has complained ,which is minuscle. However,this basis of...
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Line 5, column 159, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , this
...s complained ,which is minuscle. However,this basis of the claim is weak and unreliab...
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Line 5, column 220, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...aim is weak and unreliable. First of all,the author should have made customers aware...
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Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...en havd taken the feedback. Additonially,it may be possible that many compalints we...
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Line 5, column 410, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... unnoticed because either the customers didnt come again or they may have bad health ...
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Line 5, column 499, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...cts after long time of eating margarine.Therefore,the author should provide a more credib...
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Line 5, column 508, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
... long time of eating margarine.Therefore,the author should provide a more credible s...
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Line 5, column 561, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'customers'' or 'customer's'?
Suggestion: customers'; customer's
...hould provide a more credible survey on customers feedback and should also take into acco...
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Line 9, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
... term effect of margarine. Secondly,the author has not provided any substantial...
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Line 9, column 356, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...h can only be tracked in long time. Also,the author should also provide a study on t...
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Line 15, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
... margarine intake. In conclusion,the argument has several weak points which ...
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Line 15, column 223, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Additionally
...health in order to bolster the argument.Additionally,the author needs to increase the credib...
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Line 15, column 235, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...der to bolster the argument.Additionally,the author needs to increase the credibilty...
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Line 15, column 306, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'customers'' or 'customer's'?
Suggestion: customers'; customer's
...he credibilty of its premises by taking customers feedback after making them aware of the...
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Line 15, column 368, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...er making them aware of the replacement.This will highly support the authors recomme...
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Line 15, column 397, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...eplacement.This will highly support the authors recommendation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1858.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 329.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.64741641337 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24105097958 2.78398813304 116% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553191489362 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.4117223736 57.8364921388 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.714285714 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35714285714 5.70786347227 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0675775722752 0.218282227539 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0302154803707 0.0743258471296 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530318893502 0.0701772020484 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0483666247926 0.128457276422 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539199056367 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 48.3550499002 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.79 12.5979740519 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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