The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions. Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the West Lansburg council to allow an access road to be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighboring Eastern Carpenteria, which had a similar sanctuary, has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. In order to preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built.
The writer recomments that in order to preserve the population of tufted groundhog, the West Lansburg council should not allow for the construction of the roads in the coastal lands of West Lansburg. According to the writer, as the population of sea otter decreased in neighboring Estern Carpenteria due to the coastal road construction, buiding roads in the coastal land of West Lansburg could have a same result leading decline of the population of the tufted groundhogs. However, this recommendation cannot be accepted as it is in that it rests on some assumptions that are not supperted well by warranted evidences.
The first problem with the argument is that the writer of the letter argues that the population of sea otters in Carpenteria declined because of the road construction. There is no evidence to demonstrate that road construction was the defenite cause of the population decline. For instance, it is tenebale to suppose that the water of that area became toxic for a specific priod of time having adverse consequences on the population of sea otters on that coastal region. Also, it is possible to say that the population of the prayers of sea otters had increased before the population decline of the sea otters.Therefore, because there are less prayers, theiThis whole idea also works for the correlation between the population of groundhog and coastal road constructions as well. To clarify, it is possible for the writer to provide supporting evidences to show that road construction was the only and exact cause for the decline of sea otters and groundhog population.
Even assuming that the population of both species declines is attributable to the road construction, there is not sufficent warrented data and proved evidence to show that because of droping the number of sea otters in Carpenteria, groundhog population will decrease as well because of road cunstruction. In fact, the writer of the letter incorrectly assumes that the two location are identical in all other aspects. As a matter of fact, these two location can be geographicaly different from each others. Therefore, if ,for example, there be more food available for groundhogs on that time, or the number of their prayers decline on that specific time of road construction, maybe there would not be a decline in groundhogs populations. To improve his letter, the writer should provide evidences relating to compare other factors contributing to the populations of groundhos and sea otters, and should also provide evidence that even if there are other factors having effects on the population of the two species, at the time of road cunstruction, none of them has effect on their population.
In the final analysis, the writers recommendation to the West lansburg counsil cannot be taken to be correct since he does not provide sufficient amount of evidences to prove his recommendation to be true. The recommendation can only be accepted if he provide compelling evidences regarding all the pointed clarified above.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The writer recomments that in order to preserve the population of tufted groundhog, the West Lansburg council should not allow for the construction of the roads in the coastal lands of West Lansburg.
Error: groundhog Suggestion: grounding
Error: recomments Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: According to the writer, as the population of sea otter decreased in neighboring Estern Carpenteria due to the coastal road construction, buiding roads in the coastal land of West Lansburg could have a same result leading decline of the population of the tufted groundhogs.
Error: buiding Suggestion: building
Sentence: However, this recommendation cannot be accepted as it is in that it rests on some assumptions that are not supperted well by warranted evidences.
Error: supperted Suggestion: supported
Sentence: There is no evidence to demonstrate that road construction was the defenite cause of the population decline.
Error: defenite Suggestion: definite
Sentence: For instance, it is tenebale to suppose that the water of that area became toxic for a specific priod of time having adverse consequences on the population of sea otters on that coastal region.
Error: toxic Suggestion: topic
Error: priod Suggestion: prior
Error: tenebale Suggestion: general
Sentence: Also, it is possible to say that the population of the prayers of sea otters had increased before the population decline of the sea otters.Therefore, because there are less prayers, theiThis whole idea also works for the correlation between the population of groundhog and coastal road constructions as well.
Error: theiThis Suggestion: thesis
Sentence: Even assuming that the population of both species declines is attributable to the road construction, there is not sufficent warrented data and proved evidence to show that because of droping the number of sea otters in Carpenteria, groundhog population will decrease as well because of road cunstruction.
Error: sufficent Suggestion: sufficient
Error: droping Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: warrented Suggestion: warranted
Error: cunstruction Suggestion: construction
Sentence: As a matter of fact, these two location can be geographicaly different from each others.
Error: geographicaly Suggestion: geographical
Sentence: To improve his letter, the writer should provide evidences relating to compare other factors contributing to the populations of groundhos and sea otters, and should also provide evidence that even if there are other factors having effects on the population of the two species, at the time of road cunstruction, none of them has effect on their population.
Error: groundhos Suggestion: grounds
Error: cunstruction Suggestion: construction
Sentence: In the final analysis, the writers recommendation to the West lansburg counsil cannot be taken to be correct since he does not provide sufficient amount of evidences to prove his recommendation to be true.
Error: counsil Suggestion: council
Error: lansburg Suggestion: labor
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minimum 3 arguments wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 18 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 490 350
No. of Characters: 2479 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.705 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.059 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.932 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 147 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 73 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.637 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.398 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.594 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.181 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 29, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
In todays progressive world, I generally - yet not entirely - disagre...
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Line 3, column 3, Rule ID: PRP_RB_NO_VB[1]
Message: Are you missing a verb?
In todays progressive world, I generally - yet not entirely - disagree with this a...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 119, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
... gives up in the times of difficulties. what I mean is that by never giving up and s...
^^^^
Line 7, column 438, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... For Instance, my sister is a clever and a prodigy in playing the piano and with ...
^^
Line 11, column 57, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun way seems to be countable; consider using: 'many ways'.
Suggestion: many ways
...arified above, a true musicion can find many way to surmount his obstacle and show his t...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, well, while, for instance, i mean, as a matter of fact, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 11.1786427146 242% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 28.8173652695 229% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2370.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 514.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61089494163 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55766086666 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 204.123752495 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472762645914 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 4.96107784431 282% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.926200741 57.8364921388 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.411764706 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2352941176 23.324526521 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70588235294 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00854989437106 0.218282227539 4% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00445637331608 0.0743258471296 6% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0109596817673 0.0701772020484 16% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00361833386917 0.128457276422 3% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00809084049676 0.0628817314937 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.05 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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