Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Children are unconditionally attached to their biological parents more than anyone else in this world. Numerous studies have been conducted to prove it otherwise and have failed to come up with a plausible condition where this unconditional attachment to their biological parents may not work. One such study was undertaken by Dr. Karp to prove the invalidity of Tertian village culture.
Dr. Karp's asessment of Dr. Field's observations lacks further information on how the interviews are conducted. If the interviews are conducted on children who have not been well-raised by adopted parents, then those children are likely to speak about their biological parents more than anything else in this world. On the other hand, interviews conducted on children who are given good care by their adopted parents will surely make the children speak mostly about their adopted parents.
For example, in poor countries children are likely to talk more about their adopted parents rather than biological parents. While in rich countries, the biological parents will outshine the adopted parents.
Thus to understand child-rearing traditions in island cultures, author needs to provide substantial evidences of how the relationship between the children and adopted parents impacted their conversations about their biological parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...s will outshine the adopted parents. Thus to understand child-rearing traditions ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, then, thus, well, while, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1130.0 2260.96107784 50% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 200.0 441.139720559 45% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.65 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 4.56307096286 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87782904287 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 204.123752495 53% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 342.9 705.55239521 49% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1943187864 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.555555556 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2222222222 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107569924915 0.218282227539 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590695799985 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438349746322 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0685133365014 0.128457276422 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213373232594 0.0628817314937 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.79 12.5979740519 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 98.500998004 41% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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