"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
The passage talks about the two famous real estate firms in there town -Adams Realty and Fitch Realty. The argument claims that people should always list there name in Adams realty than Fitch's. Stated in this way argument fails to mention several key factors on the bases of which it could be evaluated. The conclusion relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence. Therefore, the argument is rather weak, unconvincing and has several flaws.
First, the argument states than Adam Realty is clearly superior because, he has 40 real estate agents on other hand Fitch has 25 and most them work on part time. This statement is a scratch and not sustainable. It is completely invalid to state that Adam is superior because, if Adam has more real estates that means he has more workload and hence require more agents to look after the business. Similarly Fitch has less estate hence he has less agents which fits with less work. For instance, It is possible that Fitch's real estate agents are working rigorously and completing the work in less time than Adam's real estate agents.
In addition to it,The author gives a evident saying Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as Fitch's and the home sales averaged $168,000, $144,000 respectively. This argument has no legs to stand. Undoubtedly numbers show that revenue was more in Adams Realty but deciding whole of it on one years revenue is quite not acceptable to me. The average home sales of Adam Realty is slightly more than Fitch's. We know the number of agents work for Adams are more than those work for Fitch. Comparing the number of agents and the average home sales one cannot deny that Fitch's Realty agents have done more arresting work than Adams'. And also Adams Realty has more agents as a result the money spent for employment is obviously more than Fitch's Realty. Therefore this statement of authore is completely invalid.
Secondly, Author explains his experiance with both the Realty's. Time taken to sell house under Adams Realty was year ago was one month and on other hand the time it took when he sold his house with Fitch's agents was 10 years. Depending upon the time taken to sell, author concludes that Adams Realty is a best choice. The argument is not at all convincing to me here. The statement would have been much clear if explictly explained the characteristics of both the houses. In fact I can say that the house listed under Adams list was well structured and resided in a good geographical area which attracted lots of customers. Where as the house listed under Fitch's list was not in a attractive place hence took a little more time. By saying attractive I mean the condition of the house, area in which it is situated and the how old it is. Moreover, the house under Fitch was sold 10 years ago hence it is very irrelevant to compare it with the house sold recently. It is not at all conducive to compare 2 houses which are sold in the gap of 10 years. Hence, to support author's above statement we might need relevant data which is missing.
In summary, to wind up the argument is flawed and therefore unconvincing. It could considerably stengthened if the authore mentioned all the relevant facts. In order to access merits in certain situation/decision, it is essential to have full knowledge of all contributing factors. In this particular case...Without this information, the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Therefore this statement of authore is completely invalid.
Error: authore Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Secondly, Author explains his experiance with both the Realty's. Time taken to sell house under Adams Realty was year ago was one month and on other hand the time it took when he sold his house with Fitch's agents was 10 years.
Error: experiance Suggestion: experience
Sentence: The statement would have been much clear if explictly explained the characteristics of both the houses.
Error: explictly Suggestion: explicitly
Sentence: It could considerably stengthened if the authore mentioned all the relevant facts.
Error: stengthened Suggestion: strengthened
Error: authore Suggestion: No alternate word
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 30 15
No. of Words: 596 350
No. of Characters: 2785 1500
No. of Different Words: 263 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.941 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.673 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.416 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 178 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.867 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.539 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.278 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.472 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.147 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 152, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...hand Fitch has 25 and most them work on part time. This statement is a scratch and not su...
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Line 4, column 306, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r because, if Adam has more real estates that means he has more workload and henc...
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Line 4, column 398, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...more agents to look after the business. Similarly Fitch has less estate hence he has less...
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Line 4, column 443, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun agents is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...arly Fitch has less estate hence he has less agents which fits with less work. For i...
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Line 4, column 601, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sly and completing the work in less time than Adams real estate agents. In...
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Line 9, column 18, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , The
... estate agents. In addition to it,The author gives a evident saying Adams rev...
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Line 9, column 36, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... In addition to it,The author gives a evident saying Adams revenue last year ...
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Line 10, column 331, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s. We know the number of agents work for Adams are more than those work for Fitch...
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Line 11, column 304, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...t is obviously more than Fitchs Realty. Therefore this statement of authore is completely...
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Line 15, column 151, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
..., author concludes that Adams Realty is a best choice. The argument is not at all...
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Line 15, column 256, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...The statement would have been much clear if explictly explained the characteristi...
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Line 16, column 124, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...at the house listed under Adams list was well structured and resided in a good ge...
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Line 17, column 92, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Whereas'?
Suggestion: Whereas
...area which attracted lots of customers. Where as the house listed under Fitchs list was...
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Line 18, column 24, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...se listed under Fitchs list was not in a attractive place hence took a little mo...
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Line 18, column 122, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g attractive I mean the condition of the house, area in which it is situated and ...
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Line 19, column 41, Rule ID: THE_HOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'how'?
Suggestion: how
...house, area in which it is situated and the how old it is. Moreover, the house under Fi...
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Line 19, column 289, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n the gap of 10 years. Hence, to support authors above statement we might need re...
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Line 22, column 111, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng. It could considerably stengthened if the authore mentioned all the relevant f...
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Line 25, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ns unsubstantiated and open to debate.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, i mean, in addition, in fact, in summary, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2878.0 2260.96107784 127% => OK
No of words: 594.0 441.139720559 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84511784512 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93681225224 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53297808151 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 204.123752495 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452861952862 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 885.6 705.55239521 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 19.7664670659 172% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1007482296 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6470588235 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4705882353 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94117647059 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 16.0 5.15768463074 310% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375823358195 0.218282227539 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903897721867 0.0743258471296 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112053966799 0.0701772020484 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125691277734 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114693798662 0.0628817314937 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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