1.Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.

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1. Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.

The statement is based on two claims. They are : culture is preserved in cities and monetary support is required for the preservation of culture. I strongly disagree with both of the claims. It is because, the cities are not where cultures are preserved, culture preservation is not the obligatory duty of government and financial support not necessarily preserve the culture.
Firstly, The Nations culture, tradition are mostly preserved in the village. Most of the village people are engaged in agriculture whereas , urban people are engaged in other economic activities like a business. The urban people have no time for preservation for culture. For example, in Nepal, there was a tradition of singing a folk song during puddling of rice every corner of the country, Now it is limited in village area only. Because most of the people are engaged in modern agriculture and profit basis activities in the city, they have no time for it. So , cultures are not present in a city but preserved in the village. Similarly, the traditional way of farming using bullock to puddle field is nowadays only present in the village area. In cities, the bullocks are replaced by heavy mechanics so does culture.
Secondly, preservation of culture is not the duty of government. An essential role of government is to provide food and security to the people. A country like Nepal, many people are still deprived of healthy food , many areas are still not linked to the main road and market system, the first priority will be development activities, not culture preservation. Furthermore, for the preservation of culture , the self-response requires not the forceful activities. Self-motivated people will preserve his/her culture more sincerely than the person who does a thing in compulsion.
Finally, financial support is not the solution for culture preservation . Just after the earthquake in Nepal 2015; a huge amount of economic support has been provided to rebuild the heritage but still the process is not satisfactory. Government perception about conservation of heritage through substantial economic support has been failed in Nepal.
Some might say that city has a diverse population and a number of people also high, thinking that, part of the population will support culture. However, city people are mostly concerned with their busy life, economic activities. Rather, preserving culture. Furthermore, corruption rate is also high in cities. In conclusion, the culture of the Nation is preserved in the village and it is not the role of government who preserves cultural.

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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'similarly', 'so', 'still', 'whereas', 'for example', 'in conclusion']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.279569892473 0.240241500013 116% => OK
Verbs: 0.148387096774 0.157235817809 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0774193548387 0.0880659088768 88% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0774193548387 0.0497285424764 156% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0172043010753 0.0444667217837 39% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12688172043 0.12292977631 103% => OK
Participles: 0.0494623655914 0.0406280797675 122% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.94345923896 2.79330140395 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.010752688172 0.030933414821 35% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.105376344086 0.0997080785238 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00860215053763 0.0249443105267 34% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00645161290323 0.0148568991511 43% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2579.0 2732.02544248 94% => OK
No of words: 417.0 452.878318584 92% => OK
Chars per words: 6.18465227818 6.0361032391 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.58838876751 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.407673860911 0.366273622748 111% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.342925659472 0.280924506359 122% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.235011990408 0.200843997647 117% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.136690647482 0.132149295362 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94345923896 2.79330140395 105% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 219.290929204 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479616306954 0.48968727796 98% => OK
Word variations: 52.4956191087 55.4138127331 95% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6194690265 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.68 23.380412469 71% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6547146599 59.4972553346 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.16 141.124799967 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.68 23.380412469 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.64 0.674092028746 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.21349557522 153% => OK
Readability: 50.9725659472 51.4728631049 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.87610619469 1.64882698954 114% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292671452632 0.391690518653 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.12198208675 0.123202303941 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0754557514001 0.077325440228 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.533433473059 0.547984918172 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.16293554348 0.149214159877 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119743940024 0.161403998019 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705797709278 0.0892212321368 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.409261594591 0.385218514788 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.052566759015 0.0692045440612 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21105081136 0.275328986314 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596639093697 0.0653680567796 91% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88274336283 225% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.70907079646 295% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.5995575221 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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