In this age of intensive media coverage, it is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero.
First, what make people to be considered as heroes, are their commitments to do the activities that benefit the society. Has these people and their activates disappeared? Obviously not! Even now there are numerous people who concern about the problems of people. Consider for example "Bill Gates" from his retirement as the CEO of Microsoft he has spent billions of his wealth in order to ameliorate the life of poor people all over the world. He has also gave many financial aids to the organizations which work on the education of African people. Can Gates be considered as a hero? Based on the believes of just people yes. He has all the required characteristics of a hero, who has devoted his life and his wealth to the welfare of miserable people.
Admittedly with the advent and globalization of media, people cannot hide much about their private life from the society. This has gave the public access to almost every aspect of the life of famous people. When people see these renown individuals and understand that they have their own mistakes, selfishness, and, banal desires, they will not applaud them as before. Nowadays with the free flow of information that media has given to us the possibility to become a hero in eyes of other citizens of a society become much harder, however it is not impossible. People see famous individuals and become aware about their degradations and merits, but in some cases the merits of individuals are so high that despite their few degradations they can be considered as a hero.
Another thing to mention is about the differences between the present time and past time. In past people had limited information about their champions. Their information was a mixed story of reality and fiction. This caused to the situation in which these heroes were believed to have supernatural abilities. Take for example Hercules. It is very plausible that this individual was a powerful man who helped other people and fight with villain, but as people knew a little about his life they started to make tales about him and gave him supernatural abilities.
In conclusion, I think if we believe that an individual is a hero if and only if he or she had supernatural abilities, this is true that we can cannot regard a person as hero any more, but if the requirements of being a hero is the commitments of these people to the welfare of all members of the society and devoting their life in order to help others, we do have these heroes even now.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 467, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'given'.
Suggestion: given
... people all over the world. He has also gave many financial aids to the organization...
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Line 1, column 608, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'beliefs' (noun) instead of believes (verb)?
Suggestion: beliefs
...s be considered as a hero? Based on the believes of just people yes. He has all the requ...
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Line 2, column 131, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'given'.
Suggestion: given
...private life from the society. This has gave the public access to almost every aspec...
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Line 3, column 80, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...ifferences between the present time and past time. In past people had limited information...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, another thing, for example, i think, in conclusion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 430.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73247798002 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486046511628 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.7661029295 60.3974514979 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.2 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117055340009 0.243740707755 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0339606151194 0.0831039109588 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420410109877 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0816453969789 0.150359130593 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418923835156 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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