Although innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning.
The above given statement asserts that innovative teaching methods with use of technologies like video,computers and internet distract students from learning.technology has been playing crucial role in human lives since five decades.it has been integrated into almost all aspects of our lives.Similarly,most of us feel technology when incorporated into teaching would do better job.In my opinion,the distraction of students depends upon themselves rather blaming technology.I would like to substantiate my view in folowing ways.
internet is considered as huge technological advancement in twentieth century.it has made the life simple with all the tasks getting done by a simple click.Consequently,internet also proved its worth in transforming the education system and schooling practices.students learn better when they are provided with internet connection as it supplies them a lot of facilities and resources to gain knowledge.also,it helps the teachers or mentors to enhance their taching skills which results in students grasping more complex concepts effortlessly.Fori instance, a student understand a lesson quickly when a it is taught in the form of videos than just theoretical approach.this way it helps in increasing the analytical and thinking skills in students.
The best example could be education system in India.Usually students who are in their high school require to carry huge books daily to school.it is unnecessary burden as it could result in health problems.Th authorities of education boards decided to ban carrying heavy school bags to schools.Instead,they felt that if each student if provided with a tablet,it would be easy to carry and also have other added advantages.The similar decision is taken by japan and as a result most of the students now carry a light weight simple tablet that would do all the tasks for them.
With all this being said,it is fair to mention some disadvantages of technology in education system.it is widely known that students mostly tend to deviate towards entertainment when they are provided with electronic gadgets.In fact, most of the students are addicted to their computers or tablets and furthermore likely to develop health problems like eyesight,headache etc.But this reason cannot be used to blame or judge that technology in distracting the students.In addition,there are other factors that play important role in defining the impact of technology in teaching like school curriculum,number of students etc.In the end,it is ultimatley depends upon students themselves whether they are going to utilise the resoureces in good way or not because there are significant number of students who got benefited with the help of technology.
To conclude,it is not plausible to judge technology merely based on observing a small sample of students who gets distracted by it but to weigh the number of good things and bad things and then making a conclusion would be appropriate idea.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, similarly, so, then, in addition, in fact, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2505.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 453.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5298013245 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.52826374297 2.79657885939 126% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565121412804 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 757.8 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.2370786517 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 90.0 23.0359550562 391% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 208.867039046 60.3974514979 346% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 501.0 118.986275619 421% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 90.6 23.4991977007 386% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 22.2 5.21951772744 425% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 33.0 7.80617977528 423% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135865773312 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803800745079 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413274015649 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0803800745079 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413274015649 0.0667264976115 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 49.9 14.1392134831 353% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -28.33 48.8420337079 -58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 19.3 7.92365168539 244% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 39.6 12.1743820225 325% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.98 12.1639044944 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.49 8.38706741573 149% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 100.480337079 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 32.5 11.8971910112 273% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 38.0 11.2143820225 339% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 50.0 11.7820224719 424% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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