In any situation, progress requires discussion among people who have contrasting points of view.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
There are very few topics in the world, upon which majority of population has the same view. The issues that are directly related to progress, clearly are not one of them. In fact they tend to be some of the most controversial topics, which historically even led to violence. However, despite all that, the progress is generally achieved only after discussion and agreement from all sides.
There’s perhaps a reason why some of the biggest progress in our technology and society was made in free or democratic states. The ancient Greek would meet at the agora and discuss all the issues, rather have a single person with their own point of view make the decision. Ancient Greece is not only homeland of democracy, but majority of our technology is based on the foundations that they laid. Similarly, Rome achieved its greatness not during its initial years as a monarchy, or in its final years as an empire, but rather as a republic in between. Perhaps it’s not a coincidence that after the republic fell, the empire started to started to stagnate, and once the initial momentum was lost, it did not last long.
Yet, the discussion and understanding can only work when all sides are willing to do it. In some cases it is foolish to expect that someone with opposite view will come to understand all sides of the problem, if they show no sign of that. After the Great War, the winners of the war were very hesitant to enter another war. Yet Germany was rather eager to regain what it had lost. As a result, the allies would not react act upon act of aggression of Germans, hoping that they would eventually stop. But that was not the case. What followed was the bloodiest years of the mankind, that put the progress of our entire civilization further, than a small conflict might have earlier. Nevertheless, none of them was the perfect solution. It would simply have been a lesser evil at best. But had all sides been willing to listen and understand each other, our society would probably be much further advanced.
Overall, unhindered progress is only possible when despite their differences, people understand and come to the overall agreement. Because, progress is not a zero sum game. While some may benefit more than others, it’s usually not on the expense of somebody else. In the end, everyone wins.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 512, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... as a monarchy, or in its final years as an empire, but rather as a republic in b...
^^
Line 6, column 639, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'started to'.
Suggestion: started to
...hat after the republic fell, the empire started to started to stagnate, and once the initial momentum...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 133, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tand and come to the overall agreement. Because, progress is not a zero sum game. While...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, nevertheless, similarly, so, while, in fact, as a result, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 402.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83084577114 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53872753493 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554726368159 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.2002607075 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4347826087 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4782608696 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08695652174 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0994135011217 0.243740707755 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0265649239152 0.0831039109588 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0308841674933 0.0758088955206 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0646772680388 0.150359130593 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285623583077 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.