Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years.Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.

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Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years.

Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.

New people surely provide new opportunities, but there is not guarantee whether they would be able to maintain a healthy relationship with public or consumers.
History clearly opposes the stance of the claim. Steve Jobs, for example was asked to step down as the CEO of Apple. John Sculley, the new guy with a business mindset was appointed. Soon the profits of the company started to fall. Steve Jobs was called again in a desperate fashion to restore the value of apple. Four years after that Apple became one of the most profitable company in the world. This clearly states that although new power bodies might bring something extra to the table, they cannot replace the people who are running the organization successfully. Now, John sculley might have done well if he was given more liberty, but huge organizations like Apple do not allow mistakes. Steve Jobs had the employee confidence and knew exactly the kind of product they needed. By working with the team, and understanding them he created history.
Now, In Indian politics The indian national congress(INC) party was pretty dominant until the era Rahul Gandhi began. Sonia Gandhi, one of the most influential politician had the ability to communicate very effectively. On the other hand INC party was led by Rahul Gandhi, people started mocking him because he did not have the ability to be persuasive and communicative. The outcome was that other party BJP enjoyed the reliability and support of the indian public. Therefore, there is no surety of getting success. Sometimes organizations are in power because of the very person, that the claim addresses to step down.
Even in education, universities or schools remain reverent only if the Dean can manage the functioning of the school properly. For example the dean of my school was a really respected and knowledgeable person and our school resurged its position in the elite, but when he resigned , the new dean was caught in scandal which ultimately reduced the respect that people used to have for our school.
Surely addition of new people would increase the chances of success , But it is definitely not the only possible way to ensure success.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, therefore, well, for example, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1809.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 362.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99723756906 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66323589713 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580110497238 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.5779749506 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.45 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102068340344 0.243740707755 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0316913531805 0.0831039109588 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379347334476 0.0758088955206 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.057215712728 0.150359130593 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.013801586041 0.0667264976115 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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