Claim Colleges and universities should specify all required courses and eliminate elective courses in order to provide clear guidance for students Reason College students like people in general prefer to follow directions rather than make their own decisi | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Claim: Colleges and universities should specify all required courses and eliminate elective courses in order to provide clear guidance for students.
Reason: College students — like people in general — prefer to follow directions rather than make their own decisions.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

Before we dive into the topic, let us understand the fact that we are talking about college students. Many students opting for this level of study in my country are generally above or around the age of 18. We need to keep it mind that even constitution regards them as adults, capable of making their decisions.
The claim here suggests removal of all elective courses. In short it curtails the flexibility and plans on introducing rigidity in education system for them. To back this claim, it is reasoned as to help students in avoiding distractions or directions. I might disagree on some specific aspects in question here.
To begin with, dynamicity is need of education today. With change in work nature and culture, one can focus on two seemingly different courses which intersect at some point. Someone interested in computers and literature can select both these majors and find a place for oneself in NLP (Natural Language Processing) based jobs or research. Introduction of all pre-decided courses for students today may not be the best decision. In the era were technology, creativity and education are moving together - this might be a step back.
Secondly, if we discuss the reason- in the beginning we have already discussed that the average age of students in concern here. Don't you think that if one is capable to vote, one might be mature enough to decide his or her courses? Also, what stated as 'directions' could be the latest trend in the market as well.
Even if the reason still stands true, there could be changes in the claim made. Instead of eliminating optional courses, the courses can be made more focused at one. In simple words, for someone opting both literature and computers, will have to be inclined more towards either of them. Resulting in a graduate of literature with extra knowledge of coding or vice a versa but not someone with incomplete degree in both the mentioned domains.
In order to introduce improvements, one might expect some degrees of strictness but the pair of claim and reason presented here couldn't be agreed completely. Amending the claim and updating the reason with more facts, analytics and insights would be needed to come up with a plan beneficial to all.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, as to, in short, talking about, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90425531915 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64201367601 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595744680851 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.881677489 60.3974514979 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.8095238095 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9047619048 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177457488006 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0512723179228 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429972634777 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0903494922944 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0197569598521 0.0667264976115 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, as to, in short, talking about, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments