Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
Our goals are continuously shaped by our interests, society and our surrounding. Author claims that young people are advised to follow their dreams however, more emphasis should be given on picking worthy goals. Reason being many people's dreams are inherently selfish. Author’s statement is partially agreeable because certain things have to be considered such as an individual’s nature and society's role. Also the reasons to follow a particular goal must be taken into account.
Picking worthy goals is a boon for society as well as for oneself. Goals should be alligned in such a way such that it not only helps society but also contributes towards the progress of humanity. For example, one might have a goal of becoming worlds best video gamer. Even though such individual acheives his dreams, his social contributions would be far less than lets say an environment lawyer. This individual then can be motivate to play for some awareness cause or charity which will be beneficial for society. Hence, along with following dreams, making those dreams into worthy goals is important.
Picking our goals depends a lot on our surroundings, family support, society and various other factors. Worthy goals with less materialistic pursuit might need an individual to be from a more affluent or wealthy family as there would be no worries about basic ammenities. Whereas a person from a poor background may have his goal to be richest man in the world. Worthy goals may vary from country to country and also state to state. In Western countries people would have more independence of following their dreams, while in poor countries, young individuals would be obliged to follow a track set by their surroundings, society or family. Following dreams without any concern for society of people we care for would be selfish.
Although young people, especially those from poorer regions of the world might not have a choice of pursuing their dreams and have to follow the path laid out by the people around them, everyone has only one life and have to live it to its fullest. Following a path which leds to your dreams while doing something worthy whithin the social, economic and political bounds would be a better choice for any young individual.
I partially agree with the claim that Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals and agree on the reason on the condition that people following their dreams completely disregard the society and people around them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Also,
...vidual's nature and societys role. Also the reasons to follow a particular goal...
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Suggestion:
...cular goal must be taken into account. Picking worthy goals is a boon for socie...
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...also contributes towards the progress of humanity. For example, one might have a ...
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Suggestion: worlds the best
...mple, one might have a goal of becoming worlds best video gamer. Even though such individua...
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...dreams into worthy goals is important. Picking our goals depends a lot on our s...
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Suggestion: be the richest
... a poor background may have his goal to be richest man in the world. Worthy goals may vary...
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...f people we care for would be selfish. Although young people, especially those ...
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...etter choice for any young individual. I partially agree with the claim that Ev...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'whereas', 'while', 'as for', 'for example', 'such as', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248936170213 0.240241500013 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.151063829787 0.157235817809 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.108510638298 0.0880659088768 123% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0510638297872 0.0497285424764 103% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0468085106383 0.0444667217837 105% => OK
Prepositions: 0.123404255319 0.12292977631 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0531914893617 0.0406280797675 131% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.6635203161 2.79330140395 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0297872340426 0.030933414821 96% => OK
Particles: 0.00212765957447 0.0016655270985 128% => OK
Determiners: 0.0723404255319 0.0997080785238 73% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.036170212766 0.0249443105267 145% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00425531914894 0.0148568991511 29% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2579.0 2732.02544248 94% => OK
No of words: 421.0 452.878318584 93% => OK
Chars per words: 6.12589073634 6.0361032391 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.58838876751 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.394299287411 0.366273622748 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.25890736342 0.280924506359 92% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.161520190024 0.200843997647 80% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.106888361045 0.132149295362 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6635203161 2.79330140395 95% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 219.290929204 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510688836105 0.48968727796 104% => OK
Word variations: 57.3040812238 55.4138127331 103% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6194690265 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.05 23.380412469 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1436873381 59.4972553346 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.95 141.124799967 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.05 23.380412469 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 0.674092028746 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.21349557522 211% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 46.940736342 51.4728631049 91% => OK
Elegance: 1.7094017094 1.64882698954 104% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.462730919173 0.391690518653 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0705229006192 0.123202303941 57% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0637448963401 0.077325440228 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.462588236676 0.547984918172 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.177237261449 0.149214159877 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141065493956 0.161403998019 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116866671062 0.0892212321368 131% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.307994114245 0.385218514788 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0426259652407 0.0692045440612 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.307371970014 0.275328986314 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135920561273 0.0653680567796 208% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.4325221239 153% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88274336283 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 15.0 7.22455752212 208% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.5995575221 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.