Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Human beings are nurtured by their elders and inherit some of their capabilities. Recent days parents support their children to pursue their dreams, however still few places and traditions does not accept that and believe it's going against their conventions and customs for example inherited work culture like making swords, pottery, agriculture/farming and breeding livestock. All these trivial aspects also hinder young from dreaming. As A.P.J Abdul Kalam stated "Dream your goals, strive for it until you attain it", young minds should dream their goals and move forward. People who possess a dream, is not selfish about their goals. Rights which they got to dream should not be snatched away or mislead by the elders. As the statement says emphasis should be given on the goals, but picking worthy one or not is skeptical. What really means worthy goal here, every goal in a child's heart is worth enough. Every goal has a nature to bring the child in an effective way in the society if he/she is properly guided.
Certain factors and example can be noted here, Sachin Tendulkar who is middle class boy, had goals of becoming a cricket player. But what if he lost or stopped trying to be a cricket, is there a possibility for us mention that as a unworthy goal, since he failed in it. Society names the goal of people to be unworthy if they fail. However people who have attained pinnacle in their career like Mark Zuckerberg, Steve Jobs, Bill Gates all came from a normal background whose goals and iterations were incessant. Failure or success, society cannot gauge an individuals performance and criticise their goals where unworthy. But a well wisher or their parents should never criticise for their failure. They should give them a chance to come up and give a further try to achieve it.
Individuals goals cannot be nominated as inherently selfish, it has its own virtues, strength, beliefs and order to attain its destiny. When a student work for his/her exam to become a rank holder is a competition among others. This is were healthy competition lies among us, during schools people get this intrinsic character. If such traits are questioned has selfish behaviour then it turns our whole system to be inane and worthless. An individual's dreams start from their school from getting good grades, identifying their field of interest, exploring their possibilities, coming up with a goal to achieve it. All these activities shows an individuals persistence and his/her perseverance.
In conclusion, inherent qualities which we have nurtured and developed cannot be questioned as selfishness. Emphasis for goals should be given considered significant during early stages for young children. Society should not consider a goal to be worthy or unworthy, it is an individuals decision, while society should lead them properly and guide them when needed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...spects also hinder young from dreaming. As A.P.J Abdul Kalam stated apos;Dream yo...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: J
...also hinder young from dreaming. As A.P.J Abdul Kalam stated apos;Dream your goa...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...om dreaming. As A.P.J Abdul Kalam stated apos;Dream your goals, strive for it unt...
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Message: Consider replacing "in an effective way" with adverb for "effective"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ry goal has a nature to bring the child in an effective way in the society if he she is properly gu...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...re a possibility for us mention that as a unworthy goal, since he failed in it. S...
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Suggestion: However,
... of people to be unworthy if they fail. However people who have attained pinnacle in th...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ure or success, society cannot gauge an individuals performance and criticise their goals w...
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Suggestion: where
... is a competition among others. This is were healthy competition lies among us, duri...
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Suggestion: been
... is a competition among others. This is were healthy competition lies among us, duri...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...hieve it. All these activities shows an individuals persistence and his her perseverance. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, so, still, then, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2417.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 479.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04592901879 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59507773655 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 215.323595506 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56993736952 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 723.6 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.740449438202 270% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9501717367 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.68 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.16 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215920466725 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637135626295 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624691470791 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135935944601 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0801081408703 0.0667264976115 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.