Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
The speaker claim that the young people should be given the advice to give more emphasis on following specifically those dreams which worth more on the basis of the reason that many people dream the selfish dream. I agree with the claim the speaker asserts, but not on the basis he/she has shown here.
To substantiate my thought, let us know what is called "Worthy Goals". In my view, worthy goals are those, which are having a number of prospects for the welfare of both the dreamers and the other living beings. Whether the dream is smaller or bigger, it should have good aspects. People's deeds drive by there dreams and goals. But everyone should be careful enough that what if his or her goal can bring any bad consequence or if there any possibility of that coming.
In history, many great men dream great things and goals. Many great political figures work hard to change the society to go under the same unjustified systems. But bringing the great change in society do not have to be inherently selfish. It can be dreams of the people, dreams of the whole nation he/she works for.
Again, there is a chance that the inherently selfish dream can be sometimes diabolical enough to bring the worst example in human history. The leaders who call for wars against nations to fulfil his/her dreams to rule and dictate cannot bring any good, let alone the worthiness of goal. This goal is inherently selfish, but not an epitome to dream in general.
The examples of worthy goals can be anything like: to pick a dream occupation, to pursue higher study, to plan for a business project, to solve any materialistic problems, To be politically involved and work for nations etc. These are the dreams to pick, these are the dreams worth in the end. Of course, these dreams have not to be particularly one's own, or selfish.
In conclusion, I must say, young people should follow their dreams which are worth more and for good reasons. These reasons should not have to be always inherently selfish, rather they should have a great aspect and influence on the welfare of the people.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, in conclusion, in general, of course, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 365.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76164383562 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40914315187 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504109589041 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.0803513275 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4736842105 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2105263158 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21052631579 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312572820016 0.243740707755 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101443061432 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837397540101 0.0758088955206 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173791872221 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785924747824 0.0667264976115 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 100.480337079 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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