Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
The statement raises a variety of issues about personal goals. One school of thought postulates that young people should be adviced to follow their dreams because this gives meaning to their endeavors. Another school of thought posits that it is preferable to motivate teenagers to achieve worthy goals on the grounds that their dreams might be selfish. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the latter for the following reasons.
The first thing that springs to mind is that young, immature and restless people long for money and fame. A case in point would be world dictators who oppress their nation to cater to their need for power and recognition. It strikes me that, if these people were adviced to pick worthy goals from a young age, they would not have aspirations to conquer the whole world.
Another issue I would like to focus on is the extent to which dreams are plausible. Even if people’s dreams are not selfish, they appeal to the emotion and, thus, becloud logical reasoning. Common sense informs me that the absence of rationality makes the process of achieving a goal more difficult. Therefore, dreams might not be attained since they may seem intimidating or too challenging. Admittedly, the disappointment from a possible failure might result in quitting a dream.
A compelling argument in favor of dreams underscores the inspiration that they offer to the dreamer. Few would disagree that if someone aspires to be a renowned doctor, lawyer or professor, he will study hard to realize his dream. Nevertheless, inspiration cannot ensure success, whereas a set of worthy, achievable goals can promote a step-by-step approach and guarantee long-term success. It should also be mentioned that the inspiration that dreams provide can be supplanted by discussions between the young generation and their professors or entrepreneurs from the business world and researchers.
In conclusion, young people should be taught how to set worthy goals rather than big dreams. Since inspiration does not have limits, it might end up in selfish or unattainable goals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 481, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...that dreams provide can be supplanted by discussions between the young generation...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, whereas, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 339.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14159292035 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8251610824 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587020648968 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 704.065955056 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1160773562 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.8333333333 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38888888889 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251574664886 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720454800831 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576840201023 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135302608228 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037466070283 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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