Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
Having dreams and aspiration and working towards such goal are the vital elements for achieving a purpose in life. This elements are vital to human existence as we all have a purpose for living, which should be fulfilled. Choosing the right and worthy dream is very important in other to remain relevant and avoid adversely affecting others.
As children, many of us had the dream of becoming successful when we grow up, many of of us never took out time to plan how to achieve this goal or even weigh the worthiness of such goal. This is why many end up not achieving such goals. The worthiness of a dream should not be material driven like we have in our society today where many people believe being successful is being able to accumulate as many wealth as possible. Aspirations and dream should be plan in such a way that it will be relevant and beneficial to others in the society .
Adolf Hitler was a egregious leader that had a dream, he wanted to achieve a better society in Germany, but his dream was detrimental to others. The decisions he made destroyed many lives and dreams. His intentions might have been good but he did not consider others.Therefore, for every dream we have we should consider if it will be inimical to others before pursuing such dream.
Many people do not eventually achieve their set out goals because they are not passionate about such dreams. The basis for pursuing a dream should be based on passion and worthiness to oneself and others. This will ensure the perseverance to pursue such dreams regardless of setbacks.
Although, it is important to have a worthy dream, sometimes young people are faced with many option, it therefore becomes difficult to choose which to pursue. Thus, sometimes they have to try different opportunities before they eventually choose to pick one.
For the development of any society it is important for young people to make right decisions by pursuing worthy dreams and persevering to achieve such dreams regardless of difficult they face.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rds such goal are the vital elements for achieving a purpose in life. This elemen...
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Line 1, column 117, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...ments for achieving a purpose in life. This elements are vital to human existence a...
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Line 5, column 84, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
...coming successful when we grow up, many of of us never took out time to plan how to a...
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Line 5, column 403, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...ccessful is being able to accumulate as many wealth as possible. Aspirations and dre...
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Line 5, column 403, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[2]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun wealth seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much wealth', 'a good deal of wealth'.
Suggestion: much wealth; a good deal of wealth
...ccessful is being able to accumulate as many wealth as possible. Aspirations and dream shou...
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Line 5, column 460, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'planned'?
Suggestion: planned
...ssible. Aspirations and dream should be plan in such a way that it will be relevant ...
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Line 5, column 521, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...at it will be relevant and beneficial to others in the society . Adolf Hitle...
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Line 5, column 544, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...and beneficial to others in the society . Adolf Hitler was a egregious leade...
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Line 9, column 18, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... in the society . Adolf Hitler was a egregious leader that had a dream, he w...
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Line 9, column 268, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...een good but he did not consider others.Therefore, for every dream we have we should cons...
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Line 17, column 89, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun option seems to be countable; consider using: 'many options'.
Suggestion: many options
..., sometimes young people are faced with many option, it therefore becomes difficult to choo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1689.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 345.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89565217391 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65253212858 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484057971014 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7869522713 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.5625 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5625 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.75 5.21951772744 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186111527416 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738448531191 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0432328462824 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108527058656 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292957843365 0.0667264976115 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 100.480337079 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.