Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
The claim suggests that young people should not be blindly advised to follow their dreams, instead they should be persuaded to pick goals that are worthy. The claim is based on the reason that if not persuaded, young people will follow their inherent selfish dreams. I disagree with the claim and the reason given for the claim. My opinion will be based on the ambiguous nature of the definition of worthy and the assumption that selfish dreams are unworthy.
What is worthy? Is volunteering at an orphanage considered more worthy than working day and night to build a business from scratch?What I may consider as worthy, may not be considered as worthy by you. It is very subjective to determine if someone's goals are worthy or not. It is a matter of opinion and perspective. Let us consider an instance where a young fellow wants to pursue his dream of opening a hotel. A lot of people may not consider it as a worthy goal because it might ruin the heritage of the city. On the other hand, a lot of people might think of it as a worthy goal because it will help the tourism industry of the city. For the advisor to decide what is worthy may or may not be what is best for the young person involved.
The reason given for the claim is that many people's dreams are inherently selfish. For the sake of the argument, let us assume that the claim suggests that worthy goals are goals that are for the betterment of the people around you, and any goal that does not directly contribute to the society is not worth pursuing. I disagree with the reason for the claim as well. Even if we were to assume the aforementioned definition of worthy, a selfish dream also leads to betterment of the society. For example, anyone who wants to open a business might be construed as pursuing a selfish goal and hence, not a worthy one. However, we miss the point that it is because of such businesses that we have increased opportunities for employment and it aids in strengthening the economy. Inherently selfish dreams and worthy dreams are not mutually exclusive.
The only part of the claim that I agree with is that one must not give a blanket advice of following your dreams to the young people. It must come with a caveat but the caveat should not be of picking worthy goals, but of picking realistic goals. Young people should be aware of their realities and obstacles before setting out to pursue their dreams. To illustrate this point, let us imagine a young boy who is from a poor socio-economic background. He wants to become an actor but his family is in dire need of money. In such a scenario, advising the young boy to pursue his dream is a foolish advice. He has to account for his financial conditions in order to choose a goal. Advising him to pursue a realistic goal will help him care for his family.
In conclusion, I would like to state that emphasising on realistic goals is more important that pursuing worthy goals. There are no dreams that are purely selfish or worthless as deciding what is worthy is purely a matter of personal opinion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...on that selfish dreams are unworthy. What is worthy? Is volunteering at an or...
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Suggestion: What
... night to build a business from scratch?What I may consider as worthy, may not be co...
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Suggestion: want
...nsider an instance where a young fellow wants to pursue his dream of opening a hotel....
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... best for the young person involved. The reason given for the claim is that m...
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Suggestion: the surrounding people
...re goals that are for the betterment of the people around you, and any goal that does not directly co...
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...hy dreams are not mutually exclusive. The only part of the claim that I agree ...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'blanket advice'.
Suggestion: blanket advice
... I agree with is that one must not give a blanket advice of following your dreams to the young p...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'foolish advice'.
Suggestion: foolish advice
...ng the young boy to pursue his dream is a foolish advice. He has to account for his financial co...
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...l will help him care for his family. In conclusion, I would like to state tha...
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Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...ng what is worthy is purely a matter of personal opinion.
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... purely a matter of personal opinion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, then, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.5258426966 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2523.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 550.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58727272727 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53732533088 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.407272727273 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 780.3 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.6245193903 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9655172414 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58620689655 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271094589163 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0839816440952 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731063969189 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168208828506 0.150359130593 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701987985892 0.0667264976115 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.8420337079 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.1743820225 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.