Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
The author asserts that the major cities should receive financial support in order to preserve the cultural traditions. It is true that preserving the cultural traditions is very important in maintaining the harmony of nation. However I do not agree with the authors claim on the below grounds.
Firstly, I feel that the cost to maintain the cultural traditions in the villages or rural areas will be less expensive than to maintain it in the cities. For example, consider an old temple in a city in reference to a temple in the village. The worker costs to maintain the temple in the city will be far more than the temples in the villages. As in the metropolitan areas where many people visit the site, it also increases the maintenance and the security costs associated with it.
Secondly, the major cities should focus its attention on the development factors such as Education, Health, Infrastructure and the cultural aspects should be left to the people. For example, consider the city of Mumbai, there is a huge cultural difference between Mumbai and rest of the cities. The social life in Mumbai is compared to other developed cities like New York, London, Paris. In such metropolitan cities cultural aspects are less observed even if the government spends the money in maintaining the cultural aspects. So instead, the government should spend money for development aspects in that region.
Finally, there is a chance that the cultural aspects fade away gradually in the cities, but in most cases the integrity of these traditions are maintained in the villages. For example, in cities popular music concerts can easily replace the Shakespear’s poetry.
However, majority of the people experience the cultural aspects of the nation into big major cities as the majority of the
people visit the cities rather than the rural parts. Hence it becomes necessary to maintain these sites.
To sum up, to preserve the cultural traditions is very important factor for any nation. However there shouldn’t be any difference in villages or cities in order maintain the culture and tradition.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, such as, in most cases, it is true, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 345.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12173913043 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77075676444 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472463768116 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1275603561 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.1666666667 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1666666667 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.21951772744 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286262947794 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0979128918207 0.0831039109588 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084743414513 0.0758088955206 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157838787128 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0882755328899 0.0667264976115 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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