Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation’s cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which the claim is based.
The claim suggests that cities are the primary places where a nation’s cultural traditions are preserved and generated, so in order for the nation to succeed, governments must make sure that major cities receive the financial support needed because of the cultural necessity. Due to the characteristics and the population of cities, they are not as effective as small towns and villages when preserving and generating cultural traditions. Cities should be ensured with government funding, which however not primarily due to its cultural function. I therefore tend not to agree with the claim and the reason.
Cultural traditions are generated and preserved by people. In general, the population in cities is only a small percentage. They therefore are not the primary means of preserving cultural traditions. Take China for an instance. The city population only takes up approximate ten percent, and the rest lives in towns and villages. Considering traditions are passed on and created by citizens, towns and villages are the prominent sources of reserving the nations’ cultures. Though the allocation of the population may vary in different countries; still, including many developed countries, people who live in places rather than cities consist of the majority of the population. Hence, it is not primarily in cities that a nations’ cultural traditions are generated and preserved.
In addition, one of the common characters of cities determines that cities are not reliable for preserving cultural traditions. Compared to Beijing, clearly Tanfang, a small town, is more likely to help preserve traditions. Due to the economic development and globalization, many foreign people come in cities and established their business branches there. As a result, people who bring with foreign traditions with them work and live here in cities of other nations. While exposed to and communicating with other exotic cultures, the local traditions will inevitably be influenced. By contrast, small towns are relative isolated and therefore more effectively in preserving the nations' cultures.
However, this is not to deny the importance of cities. They bear economic and political significance. Strong cities are critical in supporting the whole nation. Governments need to make sure their cities receive enough financial support so as to thrive. However, preserving cultural traditions is not the reason. For example, Hong Kong was governed for about a century by British colony. It is not helping preserve many traditioans; nonetheless, Chinese government makes sure it stays prosperous because of its economic significance. The claim in itself is reasonable, but the reason which is based on makes the statement as a whole flawed.
In conclusion, cities are undoubtedly important in all ways; however, in preserving and generating cultural traditions, they are not the primary way, which subsequently explains that cultural function is not the main reason for governments to ensure the cities’ prosperity.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: It is not helping preserve many traditioans; nonetheless, Chinese government makes sure it stays prosperous because of its economic significance.
Error: traditioans Suggestion: traditions
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 462 350
No. of Characters: 2476 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.636 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.359 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.872 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 201 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 157 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 121 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 81 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.987 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.456 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.052 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 238, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...cities receive enough financial support so as to thrive. However, preserving cultural tr...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, therefore, while, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in general, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2574.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 462.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57142857143 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06742873096 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471861471861 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 816.3 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.4373112195 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3333333333 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1111111111 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2962962963 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.83258426966 290% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.470277777918 0.243740707755 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124472172879 0.0831039109588 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111614145586 0.0758088955206 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288677183988 0.150359130593 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107012986327 0.0667264976115 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 48.8420337079 76% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.73 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 100.480337079 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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