The desire of corporations to maximize profits creates conflict with the general welfare of the nation at large
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations or reading.
The famous baseball player Yogi Berra once said, "In theory, there is no difference between theory and practice. But in practice, there is." In a capitalist economy or an economy that is driven by wealth, the sole aim of big Multi National Companies in such economies is to make a profit. In theory, one may assume that a part of this profit which is accrued by these big corporations will ultimately reach the Government by taxation and thus can be used for the general welfare of the nation. But in reality, the truth is far from this.
For example, consider a Capitalist economy like the United States. The big Corporations, like Goldman or other big investment banking organizations, have grown so influential, that keeping a check on their activities by utilizing governmental organs or policies is next to impossible. Many-a-times, it is only when huge finance related scandals are reported by news agencies, that the nation gets to know the financial discrepancies that happen at these corporations. Further, such organizations usually cater to the interests of the rich and the powerful. It is all but a childish dream to imagine that, these organizations, that are run and controlled by the rich and elite would want to invest the profits that they created to promote welfare activities for the public. It is a common behavior of all such institutions that they do not invest in a cause which does not give them returns.
At first, politicians and corporate leaders must realize that Multi National Companies are not like islands that can stand separately from the rest of the country and hope to achieve overall economic growth that is not influenced by the general nature of the economy of the country. We see this pattern in some of the under-developed or developing countries. In these countries, the Governments try to encourage existing companies to flourish and grow by giving them tax exemptions and in return, the Government officials demand bribes. This becomes a vicious circle, and the money that is trapped in this circle will end up never trickling down for public welfare. These corrupt organizations become so powerful that they become influential in even making policy decisions for the Government.
However, outliers, though few, do exist. Some of the big corporations are involved and encourage their employees to participate in community building and other such activities as part of their corporate social responsibility (CSR) program. It is a laudable trend. Some big names in the industry, like Amazon and Facebook, are well known for their CSR activities. However, this trend is yet to catch on. We see how CEOs of some of the big firms, like Bill Gates, who are also some of the richest people in the world are also some of the most well-known figures in running charity organizations. They set up scholarships in their names or in the names of their organizations, or to contribute to the causes of environment and education. Thus, change, however small is happening. It is up to all organizations- big or small - to realize this and play their part responsibly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, thus, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2591.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 517.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01160541586 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96014443763 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52417794971 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 825.3 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.8680299962 60.3974514979 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.958333333 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5416666667 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.625 5.21951772744 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0674760761324 0.243740707755 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0171656326905 0.0831039109588 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0289620400351 0.0758088955206 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0461276221155 0.150359130593 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267808130404 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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