Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
While in fulfilling their responsibility towards students, educational institutions can deter their students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed, educational institutions are also expected to fulfil their responsibility in developing the fields that have been ignored.
Firstly, if educational institutions encourage their students to pursue only specific fields, the other fields will never see the phase of development. To exemplify, in India, the software field is booming at current scenario, many software start-ups have been evolved as giant companies. Google, Microsoft, Apple have been expanding its branches and have been collaborating with many software companies in India. So, in prestigious educational institutions like IITs and NITs students are interested to study only specific branches like Computer-Science, Electrical Engineering, Information Technology and by the end of their education most students are expected to get a job. But, very few students who study branches like Chemical Engineering, Material and Metallurgical Engineering, Civil Engineering get job after graduation and other unemployed students tend to pursue higher-education in software fields or study these fields in foreign universities. Due to this technological development in these fields in India is very poor. Actually, it’s an inter connected, exacerbating process, due to less demand in these fields, students are afraid to study these fields and these fields are not progressed, and devoid of progress in these fields supress students from studying these fields.
Secondly, institutions can encourage the students to form inter-disciplinary collaborations, this way the under-developed fields can be exhorted, and the students in developing fields can gain profound skills in accomplishing new tasks. The fields like Process Control, System Identification form best examples for this. In these fields Chemical Engineering students learn concepts of Numerical Techniques, Machine Learning and Artificial Intelligence and apply these to Chemical processes to make them automatic.
Although, the above mentioned points reasons for educational institutions to encourage students to pursue undeveloped fields, in many developing countries where unemployment is a severe problem, we can understand the responsibility of the educational systems to make their students successful. Under such circumstances educational institutions of any country can demand government to establish new industries, foreign collaborations in these fields.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 228, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...e field is booming at current scenario, many software start-ups have been evolved as...
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Line 2, column 228, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun software seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much software', 'a good deal of software'.
Suggestion: much software; a good deal of software
...e field is booming at current scenario, many software start-ups have been evolved as giant co...
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Line 2, column 1056, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...India is very poor. Actually, it's an inter connected, exacerbating process, due to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2213.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 362.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.11325966851 5.05705443957 121% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.43084247335 2.79657885939 123% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524861878453 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.59117977528 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.948534249 60.3974514979 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.230769231 118.986275619 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8461538462 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270749966679 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0996085980243 0.0831039109588 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086211094041 0.0758088955206 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191303453257 0.150359130593 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107001625017 0.0667264976115 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.3 14.1392134831 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 18.69 48.8420337079 38% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.92365168539 184% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.4 12.1743820225 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.45 12.1639044944 152% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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