Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Education provides the opportunity to students to think for and make make decisions in life. Education provides the stepping stone for a student to decide what field to pursue in life. Therefore, I disagree with the statement that educational institutuions have the responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study which look unfavorable to reap rewards.
To start with, education is required for an individual to uplift himself, and as said i the introductory statement, to make apt decisions in life. It i aknown fact that each and every indivudal is unique and possess peculiar talents .These talents are the key to achieve a successful life. Education institutuions have the responsibility to understand the talents of a student promote the student to pursue what they excel in life. For instance, it is a known fact that every student in a classroom are different from each other. Some students are into studies and research work. Some students excel well in acting as well as dancing. Others in writing, painting, and so on. However, some of the students are forced either by their parents or educational institutuins to pursue a particular field of study that seems to reward benefits and success . For instance, in India , majority of the students after high school take up engineering. While many candidates choose engineering because f their interests, some are force to take up the course, as they are said , enginnering could lead to a mor e stable and successful life. However, it turns out that taking such a curse without interests could prove to be detrimental in ones life. However, some of the students opt for other fields such as acting, dancing, piloting and so on. While these fields does not seem to reward benefits in terms of money and stability , students tend to be happy in life as they pursue what they like . Thereforre educational institutions must provide a latform to think for themelves.
Secondly, the staement states that there are some fields which are unlikely to succeed. I totally disagree with the statement . It is important to undertsand that every field of study provides equal success i life. Hwver, some fields and more competitive and may require rigorous preparation. It depends on the students ability to succeed in that field os study. If a student choose a field of study that is based on their interest, it is highly possible that theyare going to be successful in life.For instance, it is an affordable option to become an engineer or a doctor. However, some students may have the dessire to be a iloot. However, to be a pilot requires rigorous trainng, punctuality and so on. Moreover pilot trainning is more expensive than the conventional fields of an engineer r a doctor. However, that does not state that pilots cannot be successful in life. In fact the challenges the th field provides help an individual to become an expert in the field. Therefore, educational institutuions must take this fact into consideration forr the successful lives of the children. Educational insitutuions helps a student to understand their dreams and ambition to become true.
To conclude, it is the reponsibility of educational institutuions to promote students to pursue fields that are interesting to them rather than to follow cnventinal careers. Since education helps students to think outside the box, it helps them to face the challeneges in life and pursue the field of study based on their interests that could reslut them in leaading a successful and happy life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in fact, such as, as well as, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 90.0 58.6224719101 154% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2946.0 2235.4752809 132% => OK
No of words: 583.0 442.535393258 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05317324185 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91379618374 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90916894847 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.420240137221 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 939.6 704.065955056 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.2370786517 158% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.9145360393 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0625 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.21875 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28125 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380284844428 0.243740707755 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102069627013 0.0831039109588 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0981778181088 0.0758088955206 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259960579694 0.150359130593 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0776510733403 0.0667264976115 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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