Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
In this modern world the range of knowledge is so vast that it has been divided into many disciplines like science, commerce, arts etc. The future career of a student depends mostly on the decision he makes regarding his field of interest at high school level. So, this choice making is a very crucial issue and the educational institution helps students in this purpose by selecting a field suitable for them. However, I strongly disagree with the claim about educational institutions’ influence over students for the following two reasons.
First of all, if an educational institution discourages a student to choose his field and pushes him into a certain safe field for the assurance of success, the student will not be able to grow the power of decision making which eventually make him less confident in future life. Many may argue that, it ensures good academic result but after graduation there are many career paths of which the right one to be chosen. Even in professional life, one frequently comes up with many unexpected situations which can be solved by his intelligence and decision making ability. So, the educational institution should give freedom to the students to select their preferable field rather than imposing a certain topic on them for the sake of glorious future career life.
Another fact is that, a student best knows about his talent and is also aware of his weakness. So, only he can choose the field where he is likely to succeed. Critics may say that, experienced teachers better know the ability of a student and with wisdom they suggest the suitable field. But it impacts a detrimental effect on the career of a student. Say for example, a student is good at painting and loves to draw pictures. Now if he is forced to study science or commerce for the demanding job field, the merit of that student will be suppressed. He neither could be an expert engineer, doctor nor could be a great artist as he didn’t get the chance to flourish his talent. Thus, inhibiting a student from persuading their preferable field will make so called educated unsuitable for the real world.
Considering the above two reasons, I strongly disagree with the stated claim that dissuades students from choosing their educational field. Rather I would like to request educational institutions to be liberal regarding students’ choice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: Much may; A good deal of may
...make him less confident in future life. Many may argue that, it ensures good academic re...
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Line 13, column 141, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
... from choosing their educational field. Rather I would like to request educational ins...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, regarding, so, thus, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 395.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03037974684 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78003503152 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546835443038 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.788015699 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.388888889 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9444444444 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2035754496 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706127874268 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489494645659 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142276532804 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346358629498 0.0667264976115 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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