Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish
The claim stated here doesn't clarify what "worthy goals" means which actually weakens the statement as the reason itself refers to selfish dream but the word "worthy goals" means manifold depending on peoples' perspective.
The reason conveys that, a person's dream should not be confined to his own benefits only, rather he is supposed to devote himself for the welfare of the society. But the claim emphasizes on to choose the worthy goals only whereas it fails to mention that, what worthy goals should be. For example, a young man may consider improving career oriented skill is a right choice, but it essentially doesn't help other peoples around him. In this case, the stated claim falls short of it's own reasoning.
Apart from reasoning, the claim itself is not completely acceptable as there is no chance to undermine "following dream". Only choosing the right goal can not take a person to the apex of success if he doesn't adhere to his goal. It means one must be passionate about his goal to succeed.
So, the claim made on this reason, is
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, may, so, whereas, apart from, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 14.8657303371 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 58.6224719101 32% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 911.0 2235.4752809 41% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 181.0 442.535393258 41% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03314917127 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 4.55969084622 80% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67916497659 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 215.323595506 52% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618784530387 0.4932671777 125% => OK
syllable_count: 266.4 704.065955056 38% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7953134943 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.222222222 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1111111111 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.21951772744 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288400358415 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106392492908 0.0831039109588 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100447950507 0.0758088955206 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174023448257 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0905875457657 0.0667264976115 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 100.480337079 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.