Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based
The cultural tradition of a country is preserved by it’s major cities in the form of ancient building, planned urban life and many glorious construction. As these ancient monuments decay away with time, proper maintenance and care should be taken of these historic evidences. For this purpose governments must ensure financial support to the major cities for protecting the nation’s glorious history and I strongly agree with this claim and moderately agree with the reason for the following two reasons.
First of all, the claim asserts that, government must provide adequate financial support to the major cities. This financial support is obviously necessary for any city to prosper and at the same time to maintain it’s old history, ancient monuments. These archaic sculptures, buildings require regular maintenance as they become precarious with the passage of time. The maintenance program often costs a huge amount of money and the government should make sure the financial support regarding maintenance since these old monuments hold up the glorious history of the nation to the world. Many tourists are attracted to visit a country which is glorified by their ancient history. Many countries of the world like Italy, Greece, Egypt have protected their evidence of archaic monuments and are continuously taking care of them which makes their countries famous and well known around the globe. So, there is no scope of avoiding the financial support to preserve a nation’s tradition and history.
However the reason states that, a nation’s cultural tradition is preserved in the major cities which is not wrong but actually focus on the one side of the picture. Basically the root a nation’s tradition forms and grows up in the rural area. Though rural areas are not charmed with magnificent buildings or sculptures, the nation’s custom, tradition, culture are practiced by rural people throughout generation. So, the statement that, a country’s cultural tradition is preserved in major cities, is partially true.
From the above two paragraphs, it is apparent that, Government must underwrite it’s major cities to protect the nation’s history as well as be conscious about rural life to preserve it’s cultural tradition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 388, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'programs'.
Suggestion: programs
...th the passage of time. The maintenance program often costs a huge amount of money and ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...tion's tradition and history. However the reason states that, a nation's...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, regarding, so, well, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 353.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51841359773 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89751988847 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507082152975 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0093324624 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.866666667 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5333333333 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292358153968 0.243740707755 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10936416885 0.0831039109588 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068545998752 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189870549076 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.023604272957 0.0667264976115 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.1639044944 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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