Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
It is debatable whether conventional education have a propensity to limit the scope of our minds and spirits rather than expanding the scope. I disagree with the statement that formal education works as a restraint because of several reasons.
To begin with, there are more rooms for development and options are expanded through receiving formal education. Conventional education aid learners in setting a solid learning foundation. Such process is crucial because setting a solid foundation enables people to build upon it and escape out of one's comfort zone. Take Alfred Adler, a prominent psychologist and psychiatrist, as an example. He was born under a shoemaker father, and it seemed like Adler also was destined to become a shoemaker in the future. However, formal learning setting gave him opportunities to learn basis knowledge of the world and gradually expanded his scope of world through indoctrination of different subjects. He later became a mental doctor and an inspiring figure in Psychology until nowadays with his personality and inferiority theories. Had he not have privilege to receive formal education, his mind would have had only one option-becoming a shoemaker like his father. But because he when to conventional school, he was given more freedom and limitless choices regarding his future career.
Morever, formal education frees people's minds and spirits by enabling people to express their opinions and consolidate their own thoughts. Education teaches us an ability to effectively gather and articulate our thoughts. Such practice builds people a capacity to think uniquely and actively. Most of the colonizing nations like Germany and Japan set rigid limits on formal education because they acknowledged formal education had power to liberate people's thoughts, thus becoming uncontrollable. Education yields active thoughts and protest and revolt against wrong authorities since people who received conventional education are not stuck in a single idea. Also, when looking at developing countries, when people's fornal education levels are increased, nations develop in multidisciplnary aspects because freedom coming from such education leads people to become more novel and innovative.
Adimittedly, there are some examples where it seems like formal education restrains people's minds and spirits like in the case of Bill Gates. He was skeptical of formal education; thereby, dropped out of college. Nonetheless, formal education he received until then has to be recognized especially since he received more expensive education compared to others. Because he had a strong foundation in fundamentals in math and science, he was able to succeed as a CEO of and IT company. Therefore, a notion that formal education limits the scope of minds and spirits is not cogent.
All in all, through aforementioned reasons, formal education rather frees our minds and spirits and engenders more fruitful outcomes conducive to amelioration of a society.
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whether conventional education have a propensity
whether conventional educations have a propensity
there are more rooms for development and options are expanded through receiving formal education.
there are more rooms for development and options which are expanded through receiving formal education.
But because he when to conventional school,
But because he went to conventional school,
Sentence: Also, when looking at developing countries, when people's fornal education levels are increased, nations develop in multidisciplnary aspects because freedom coming from such education leads people to become more novel and innovative.
Error: fornal Suggestion: formal
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 456 350
No. of Characters: 2474 1500
No. of Different Words: 245 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.621 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.425 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.914 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 210 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 161 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 110 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 77 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.826 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.888 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.348 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.51 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.177 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 299, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ople to build upon it and escape out of ones comfort zone. Take Alfred Adler, a prom...
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Line 7, column 476, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'companies'?
Suggestion: companies
... was able to succeed as a CEO of and IT company. Therefore, a notion that formal educat...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'nonetheless', 'regarding', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'as to', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.276553106212 0.240241500013 115% => OK
Verbs: 0.158316633267 0.157235817809 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0981963927856 0.0880659088768 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0480961923848 0.0497285424764 97% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0561122244489 0.0444667217837 126% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.120240480962 0.12292977631 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0460921843687 0.0406280797675 113% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.98459675502 2.79330140395 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0320641282565 0.030933414821 104% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0581162324649 0.0997080785238 58% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00200400801603 0.0249443105267 8% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0100200400802 0.0148568991511 67% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2983.0 2732.02544248 109% => OK
No of words: 456.0 452.878318584 101% => OK
Chars per words: 6.54166666667 6.0361032391 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.58838876751 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.467105263158 0.366273622748 128% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.368421052632 0.280924506359 131% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.254385964912 0.200843997647 127% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.18201754386 0.132149295362 138% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98459675502 2.79330140395 107% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 219.290929204 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543859649123 0.48968727796 111% => OK
Word variations: 64.5579826531 55.4138127331 117% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6194690265 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.8260869565 23.380412469 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7184278368 59.4972553346 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.695652174 141.124799967 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8260869565 23.380412469 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.565217391304 0.674092028746 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 56.6681922197 51.4728631049 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.68702290076 1.64882698954 102% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348149718672 0.391690518653 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0811490973915 0.123202303941 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0481801263022 0.077325440228 62% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.491477544063 0.547984918172 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.158483251286 0.149214159877 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126185646716 0.161403998019 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736890591138 0.0892212321368 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.324719049856 0.385218514788 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0503946486487 0.0692045440612 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250573175454 0.275328986314 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503125158124 0.0653680567796 77% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.4325221239 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 7.22455752212 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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